A Family Party
We went back to my hometown,a small city 200 kilometers far from my city the day before yesterday.
I had lived in the small city until I was 18 years old. My parents and my two brothers are still living there. My father,my brothers,went to another city for their university and went back after graduation.
My older brother's daughter, a 18 years old girl,is learning Spanish in her college. Her parents are anxious about this thing----they hope their girl will work in the same city ,but it seems difficult to find a job which needs Spanish in the small city. The young girl ? She wants to go aboard next year.
My grandmother,is 99 years old. It's a good thing. She is still very smart ,could remember many things many years ago. She likes to sit with the young children.
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A Family Party
We went back to my hometown, a small city 200 kilometers far from my city, the day before yesterday.
I had lived in this small city until I was 18 eighteen-years-old. (100以下的数字最好写英文词。) My parents and my two brothers are still living there. My father and my brothers all went to another city for their university and went back but returned after graduation.
My older brother's daughter, an eighteen-year-old, girl ("Girl" 不用说，因为前面已经写了 "daughter"。) is learning Spanish in her at college. Her parents are anxious about this thing ("Thing" 这个词最好不要写，因为听上去很像小学生没办法才用的词。)----they hope their girl will work in the same city, but it seems difficult to find a job which that needs Spanish in the such a small city. The young girl herself ? She wants to go aboard next year.
My grandmother is 99 ninety-nine-years-old. It's a good thing and still going strong. She is still very smart; she could can still remember many things events from many years ago. She likes to sit with the young children.
写得很好，Kathy！请注意英文标点符号规则：逗号和句号空格是在后面，不是在前面。希望我的修改帮助你。继续加油学习！ =)
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A Family Party
We went back to my hometown, a small city 200 kilometers from my city, the day before yesterday.You have good skill for placing commas, but you must type a space after the comma.
I had lived in the small city until I was 18 years old. My parents and my two brothers are still living there. My father and my brothers went to another city for their university and went back after graduation.
When you list only 2 items or people, you do not use a comma. Use the conjunction "and"
My older brother's daughter, a 18 years old girl,is learning Spanish in her college. Her parents are anxious about this thing----they hope their girl will work in the same city ,but it seems difficult to find a job where Spanish is needed in the small city. The young girl ? She wants to go aboard next year.
My grandmother is 99 years old. It's a good thing. She is still very smart and can remember many things from many years ago. She likes to sit with the young children.
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A Family Party
We went back to my hometown, a small city 200 kilometers far away from my current location, city the day before yesterday.I had lived in the that small city until I was 18 years old. My parents and my two brothers are still living live there. My father and my brothers went to another a different city for their to attend university and then went back returned home after graduation.
My older brother's eighteen year old daughter, a 18 years old girl, is learning Spanish in her college. Her parents are anxious about this thing----they hope their girl she will find work in the same city, but it seems difficult to find a job which needs requires knowing Spanish in the a small city. The young girl ? She wants hopes to go aboard abroad next year.
My grandmother is 99 years old. It's a good thing. She is still very smart ,could and can remember many things many years ago from years past. She likes to sit with the young children.
Hi Kathy! You're doing an amazing job at practicing English. I hope I understood the meaning of what you were trying to say and that I haven't changed your meaning by the corrections I've made. Please let me know if there is something you would like to better understand. In the meantime, keep it up! Your practice will lead to simply getting better and better! Talk to you soon.
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