Composition
房间的中央有一张桌子. 桌子上的东西很杂乱. 我说: 你收拾盘碟, 我去煮咖啡. 后来我说: 把床上的那本书拿走. 把书放在书棚上, 好吗？
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Composition
房间的中央有一张桌子. 桌子上的东西很杂乱. 我说: 你收拾盘碟, 我去煮咖啡. 后来我说: 把床上的那本书拿走. 并且 把书放在书0
Composition
房间的中央有一张桌子. 桌子上的东西很杂乱. 我说: 你收拾盘碟, 我去煮咖啡. 后来过了一会儿我又说: 把床上的那本书拿走. 把书 去放在书棚上, 好吗？后来 means after a period of time, it could be a long period like weeks.
But when you're saying 'I said "A" then I said "B". It supposed to be just a few minutes (at most). Then 过了一会儿, 过了一阵子 will be better. They show the time in between.
Since you're starting another sentence after a while, and both of the sentences are asking he/she to do something for you, put a 又 will be more fluent.
for the last part, using two 把书blah blah blah is a bit too much. If you want to ask he/she to put the book back, then just use 把在(Place A) 的书拿去（place B） to show readers where was the book and where do you want to put it.
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Composition
房间的中央有一张放满了杂乱盘子和碗筷的桌子. 我说: 你收拾盘子和碗, 我去给你煮咖啡喝. 煮咖啡之前我又提醒到: 把床上的那本书整理好.并把它放在书柜上, 好吗？0
This compositon is very good. Especially the structure of "把" . but we say"书架" not "书棚"。
句子写得很好，特别是“把”的句型，但是我们不说“书棚”，说的是“书架”。
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Your composition is very good, clear, clear thinking, very good!
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