A terrifying trip
It happened when my friend and I went to Malaysia 13 years ago. I remember that the travel agent advised us not to go there in summer because there always were many foods there at that time. She also told us that in summer the heat is so stifling that you can hardly breathe. That was why we decided to go there in Autumn. We wanted to have an enjoyable holiday.
There, one of the trips was to go to the top of a mountain. That day it was overcast so our tour guide suggested that we take our raincoats. I remember that in our journey to get the top there were a lot of curves and such narrow roads that it was not possible to pass out with any other bus.
In the middle of the route to get the top the bus stopped in a viewing-point to take pictures and we could notice that it was raining heavily on the top. Immediately, panic broke out among us but the tour guide managed to calm down us. She also told that there was nothing to worry about, that the weather was usually like that in that zone. We trusted her words and we went on our jouney/trip to the top. Suddenly, that heavy rain was becoming, step by step, torrential and we saw how the water ran downhill by itself pulling everything real hard. Only a few minutes later, we had to get off the bus because that bus was being dragged by the water! People screamed in horror and I only tried to look for shelter. When I finally could be able to get to a small restaurant to be safe I saw an eldery couple who couldn't be able to walk and they both were stopped in the middle of the road. Without thinking twice I went out helping them. I knew it was unlikely that we reached that shelter but I was not able to abandone them there. Finally, three fire trucks came to rescue us and we were taken to the hotel. Although we couldn't leave the hotel for 3 days because of the floods, at least we were alive.
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A terrifying trip
It happened when my friend and I went to Malaysia 13 years ago. I remember that the travel agent advised us not to go there in summer because there always were many foods there at that time. She also told us that in summer the heat is so stifling that you can hardly breathe. That was why we decided to go there in Autumn. We wanted to have an enjoyable holiday.There, one of the trips was to go to the top of a mountain. That day it was overcast, so our tour guide suggested that we take our raincoats. I remember that in our journey to get to the top there were a lot of curves and such narrow roads that it was not possible to pass out with any another bus.
In the middle of the route to get the top, the bus stopped in a viewing-point to take pictures and we could noticed that it was raining heavily on at the top. Immediately, panic broke out among us, but the tour guide managed to calm down us. She also told said that there was nothing to worry about, that the weather was usually like that in that zone. We trusted her words and we went on our journey/trip to the top. Suddenly, that heavy rain was becoming, step by step, torrential and we saw how the water ran downhill by itself pulling everything real hard. Only a few minutes later, we had to get off the bus, because that the bus was being dragged by the water! People screamed in horror and I only tried to look for shelter. When I was finally could be able to get to a small restaurant to be safe, I saw an elderly couple who couldn't be weren't able to walk well, and they both were stopped in the middle of the road. Without thinking twice, I went out helping to help them. I knew it was unlikely that we would reached that shelter, but I was not able to could not abandone them there. Finally, three fire trucks came to rescue us and we were taken to the hotel. Although we couldn't leave the hotel for 3 days because of the floods, at least we were alive.** Overall, this was a very nice entry! Great job!**
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A terrifying trip
It happened when my friend and I went to Malaysia 13 years ago. I remember that the travel agent advised us not to go there in summer because there always were many floods there at that time. She also told us that in summer the heat is so stifling that you can hardly breathe. That was why we decided to go (there) in Autumn. We wanted to have an enjoyable holiday.(There,) One of the trips was to go to the top of a mountain. On that day it was overcast so our tour guide suggested that we take our raincoats. I remember that on our journey to get the top there were a lot of curves and such narrow roads that it was not possible to pass out with any other bus.
In the middle of the route to get the top the bus stopped at a viewing-point for us to take pictures and we could noticed that it was raining heavily at the top. Immediately, panic broke out among us but the tour guide managed to calm us down. She also told us that there was nothing to worry about, that the weather was usually like that in that zone. We trusted her words and we went on our journey/trip to the top. Suddenly, the heavy rain became step by step, torrential and we saw how the water ran downhill in torrents pulling everything really hard. Only a few minutes later, we had to get off the bus because the bus was being dragged by the water! People screamed in horror and I only tried to look for shelter. When I Finally,* I could be was able to get to a small restaurant to be safe. I saw an elderly couple who couldn't be were unable to walk and they both were stopped stranded in the middle of the road. Without thinking twice I went out helping to help them. I knew it was unlikely that we would reach the shelter but I was not able to abandon them there. Finally, three fire trucks came to rescue us and we were taken to the hotel. Although we couldn't leave the hotel for 3 days because of the floods, at least we were alive.
* You could also write 'Eventually, I was able to get to a small restaurant.'
A very good essay requiring only minor adjustments.
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