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Nepal flagsrijana
Love story of my friend please correct this and advice me how could i write these sentences in advance way. It is a story just like 2 years ago, on the days when my friend was in bed rest after her appendectomy. As she shared me, she accidently sent friend request to one stranger and came to know about it, after he accepted her request. When she looked onto his photos on facebook she realised the guys is really handsome and then they started chatting till late night on facebook. Soon after they started sharing their life stuffs they fell in genuine love with one another. Both were happy being on relationship, during those times they planned a lot about their future. But unfortunately, one year later ,the boy's family started concerning about his marriage and as being a genuine lover he told his family about his love relationship. Girls was flawless but the main obstacle was her caste. Girl was from lower caste family. so the boy's family didn't accept the girl. The very shocking thing in this relationship was boy who had promised my friend not to leave her until death suprisingly left her alone and married to another lady choosen by his family. one question always arises in my brain till now is that if that boy really love her with heart then why not he convinced his family to accept his love and if he was playing with that girl then why he gave fake promises to her and pretend as if he cares and loves her a lot.

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Love story of my friend

please correct this and advice me how could i write these sentences in advance way.

It is a story just like from 2 years ago, on the days when my friend was in bed resting after her appendectomy.
As she shared me, She accidentally sent a Facebook friend request to one a stranger, and came to know about it after he accepted her request. When she looked onto at his photos on Facebook she realised the guys is was really handsome, and then they started chatting till until late into the night on Facebook. Soon after, they started sharing their life stuffs and they genuinely fell in genuine love with one another. Both were happy being on in relationship, and during those times they planned a lot about their future.
But unfortunately, one year later ,the boy's family started showing concerning about his marriage, and as being a genuine lover truthful he told his family about his love relationship. The girls was flawless but the main obstacle was her caste. She was from a lower caste family, so the boy's family didn't accept the girl. The very most shocking thing in this relationship was that the boy who had promised my friend not to leave her until death suprisingly suddenly left her alone and married to another lady choosen chosen by his family.
One question always arises in my brain till now still - which is that if that boy really loved her with all his heart then why didn't he convince his family to accept his love; and if he was playing toying with that girl then why did he gave make fake promises to her and pretend as if he cared and loved her a lot.
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Love story of my friend/ My friend's love story

please correct this and advise me  [on] how could I  [can] write these sentences better. in advance way.

It is a story just like that took place 2 years ago, on the days when my friend was in bed rest after her appendectomy.
As she shared me She shared with me that she accidentally sent a friend request to one a stranger, and [only] came to know about it after he accepted her request. When she looked on at his photos on Facebook she realised [that] the guys is was really handsome so she decided to start chatting with him on Facebook, which lasted late into the night. and then they started chatting till late night on facebook. Soon after they started sharing their life stuffs stories,  they fell in genuine love with one another. Both [of them] were happy being in a relationship and during those times they planned a lot about their future.
But, unfortunately, one year later ,the boy's family started pressuring him to get married. Being that he was already in love and dating a girl, ing a genuine lover he told his family about his love relationship. His girlfriend was Girls was flawless, but the main obstacle [to them getting married] was her caste. Girl She was from a lower caste family so the boy's family didn't accept the gir lher. The very shocking thing in this relationship was [that the] boy who had promised my friend not to leave her until death, surprisingly left her alone and married to another lady/[woman] chosen by his family. One question [that] always arises in my brain till now is that, if that boy really loved her with [his whole] heart, then why didn't he convince his family to accept her? And, if he knew that he couldn't marry her, why did he lead her on for all that time?


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Love story of my friend

please correct this and advise me how could I improve it.

This is a story nearly 2 years old, told me when my friend was in bed resting after her appendectomy.
As she told it, she accidentally sent a friend request to a stranger and came to know about the stranger*, after he accepted her request. When she looked at his photos on facebook she realised he was really handsome and then they started chatting till late in the night on facebook. Soon after they started sharing their life experiences they fell in love with one another. Both were happy in their relationship, and during those times they planned a lot about their future.
But unfortunately, one year later ,the boy's family started having concerns about his marriage and as he was true, he told his family about his love. The girl was flawless except for her caste. She was from a lower caste family, so the boy's family didn't accept her. The most shocking thing in this relationship was that the boy who had promised my friend not to leave her until death surprisingly left/abandoned her and married another lady chosen by his family.
One question that always arises in my brain still is, if that boy really loved her with all his heart then why did he not convince his family to accept his love and if he was playing with that girl then why did he give false promises to her and pretend as if he cared for and loved her a lot?

*came to know of him... is good. Also one can say 'came to hear of him.'

Very well written!

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Absolute reality, Srijana. This is one of the top reason that there are a few love marriages in India.
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I did not understand what different castes did you mean.

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