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My cover letter Hello everyone, I'm looking for someone to help me to correct my cover letter. I can help you in return with what you want. Thank you in advance :) ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Dear Sir, Madam, I am a sales assistant and a real estate agent who moved to Ireland looking forward to gaining work experience and improving my skills as well. Firstly, I am interested in work with “COMPANYNAME”. I have read your job description and I'm particularly interested because I like help customers to resolve their problems and to have success on their businesses. Your firm has key attributes, I would like to share all my competences and progress at “COMPANYNAME”. For one and a half year I worked in a real estate agency as rental adviser and rental manager, managing and renting properties, landing new contracts (by phone, e-mail and in person). My priority was to develop the customers’ portfolio. I gained experience in teamwork, bargaining and leadership. I am a serious and hardworking person with good social skills. I connect well with customers and co-workers. I work equally well in a team as I do alone. I can speak and write Spanish well in addition to my fluent level of spoken and written French. I am at your entire disposal if you need further information or have any other question. Feel free to contact me. I am looking forward hearing from you. Yours sincerely, Jon Hualde

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My cover letter

Hello everyone, I'm looking for someone to help me to correct my cover letter. I can help you in return with what you want.
Thank you in advance :)
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Dear Sir, Madam,

I am a sales assistant and a real estate agent who has moved to Ireland in order to acquire work experience and to improve my skills.

Firsty, I am (very) interested in working with “COMPANYNAME”. I have read your job description and it interests me particularly because I like to help customers to resolve their problems and also to ensure that their businesses are as successful as possible (Here do you mean business like 'les affaires' or like 'une entreprise'?). Your firm has many key attributes, and I would love to put my abilities to work for the company, and to progress at “COMPANYNAME”.

I worked in a real estate agency as rental adviser and rental manager for a year and a half, where I managed and rented out properties, and was responsable for landing new contracts (by phone, e-mail and in person). My priority was to develop the customer's portfolio, and through this I gained invaluable experience in teamwork, bargaining and leadership.

I am a serious and hardworking person with good social skills, and I connect well with customers and co-workers alike. I work well both as a member of a team, and also independently. In addition, I am a proficient communicator in Spanish and a native level French speaker.

If you have any questions or desire any further information, do not hesitate to contact me.

I look forward hearing from you.

Yours sincerely,
Jon Hualde

I have re-written some lines just to make them sound more formal and natural, not because it was necessarily wrong, If you have any questions feel free to ask :)

My cover letter

Hello everyone, I'm looking for someone to help me to correct my cover letter. I can help you in return with what you want.
Thank you in advance :)
-----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------

Dear Sir, Madam,

I am a sales assistant and a real estate agent who moved to Ireland looking forward for gaining work experience and improving my skills as well.

Firstly, I am interested in working with “COMPANYNAME”. I have read your job description and I'm particularly interested because I like helping customers to resolve their problems and succeed in their businesses. Your firm has key attributes, I would like to share all my competences and to progress at “COMPANYNAME”.

For one and a half year I have worked in a real estate agency as rental adviser and rental manager and also practiced managing and renting properties, landing new contracts (by phone, e-mail and in person). My priority was to develop the customers’ portfolio. I gained experience in teamwork, bargaining and leadership.

I am a serious and hardworking person with good social skills. I deal well with customers and co-workers. I work equally well in a team as I do alone. I can speak and write Spanish well in addition to my fluent level of spoken and written French.

I am available if you need further information or have any other question. Feel free to contact me.

I am looking forward hearing from you.

Yours sincerely,
Jon Hualde

I did my best to correct .I didn'tunderstand what have you meant by the underlined sentence. The whole letter is well organized and expressed.

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