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Sweat memories with my dog I had a dog when I was a child. His name was tiao tiao. My grandfather gave this puppy to me when I was in my fourth year of elementary school. He was so cute and affectionate. He left such a deep impression on me that I still remember how he looks even though so many years have passed. He had beautiful, jade-green eyes and smooth, silky fur. The innocent way he looked at me was so adorable. I really had a lot of beautiful and happy memories with my dog.Out of all these memories, the ones that left the deepest impression on me were my little dog's loyalty. During winter when it snowed he would come walk with me to school, and after classes, he'd wait by the door of our home for me. Sadly, three months later he ate some poisonous food and caught some unknown disease. And then he passed away soon after that.My brother and I dug a hole and buried him in our front yard. We felt very sad and depressed for a long time. I will always remember him and our beautiful time together. I really miss him a lot.

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Sweat Sweet memories with my dog

I had a dog when I was a child. His name was tiao tiao. My grandfather gave this puppy to me when I was in my fourth year of elementary school. He was so cute and affectionate. He left such a deep impression on me that I still remember how he looks even though so many years have passed. He had beautiful, jade-green eyes and smooth, silky fur. The innocent way he looked at me was so adorable. I really had a lot of beautiful and happy memories with my dog. Out of all these memories, the ones that left the deepest impression on me were was my little dog's loyalty. During winter when it snowed he would come walk with me to school, and after classes, he'd wait by the door of our home for me. Sadly, three months later he ate some poisonous food and caught some unknown disease. And then he passed away soon after that.My brother and I dug a hole and buried him in our front yard. We felt very sad and depressed for a long time. I will always remember him and our beautiful time together. I really miss him a lot.


This is wonderful English. My only other note would be that 'memory' usually means a specific story or image in your mind, so saying that your little dog's loyalty is a 'memory' sounds strange. I suggest a better sentence might be "The thing I remember about my little dog that left the deepest impression on me was his loyalty." Small notes on an otherwise fantastic entry!

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