A Common Hobby at Harbin Institute of Technology (the Weihai Campus)
At HIT (Harbin Institute of Technology at Weihai), students share many interests. One of the common hobbies is going picnic in summers. During the other seasons, students enjoy staying at dorm as it is chilly outside. Two of the most popular picnic destinations for students there are the beach and the mountains adjacent to the campus. Usually, a picnic team consists of both boys and girls, but with boys a little more. The picnickers going to mountains typically bring bags of snacks and drinks, while the team visiting the beach mostly hold a barbecue. During the joy time, they would like to play little games such as riddles or tell stories and jokes when enjoying the food in the meantime. If they are a group of freshmen, they will introduce themselves to each other, and that is an excellent opportunity to make new friends and learn about different local cultures.
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A Common Hobby at Harbin Institute of Technology (the Weihai Campus)
At HIT (Harbin Institute of Technology at Weihai), students share many interests. One of the more common hobbies is going picnicking during the summer months. Over the other seasons, students prefer staying inside the dorms as it is somewhat chilly outside. Two of the most popular picnic destinations for students are the beach and the mountains adjacent to the campus.* Often, a picnic group consists of both boys and girls, but groups made up only of boys are slightly more common. Those picnickers going to mountains typically bring snacks and drinks, and enjoy hiking around or just taking in the scenic views. The groups visiting the beach mostly hold a barbecue and after the food is prepared, they like to play such games such as riddles or tell stories and jokes.** In the meantime, of course, they are also enjoying the food. If they are a group of freshmen, they will take this time to known each other better, so it becomes an excellent opportunity to make new friends and learn about different local cultures.Hi Xiaobin. This was a good composition. Your punctuation and sentence construction is of a rather high level. While I made some changes to make your sentences sound better to my native ears, as well as a few additions to clarify your ideas, they were more stylistic in nature than grammatical. Keep writing and keep posting. I hope that this helps you. J.
*As currently written, this sentence creates ambiguity: Is there only one beach that the students picnic at? If so, okay, but if not, then it should be "beaches." Similarly, are both the beach and the mountain next to the campus, or only the mountain? Unlike you, I only know of these things through your writing, so while what you write might be clear to you in your mind, on paper, it is not clear to me as the reader.
**What? No volleyball? No Frisbee!?
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