A Typical Working Day

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One note. When using numbers try to stay consistent. So with say 1 hour, or twenty minutes. Choose one or the other to use for the entirety of the writing. Grammatically speaking, typing out the word of the number is correct. :)   

A typical working day

Part 2; please read Part 1 first

I answer the phone all day, so I'm always mentally tired when I get home. When I came come home, I usually walk the dog about forty-five 45 minutes at the park.

Now I see why you asked that question in the answers section. 1/ You could actually say "When I get home" here as well, though I wouldn't... but only because you used the same expression in the previous sentence. You can't say "came" because that is referring to something that happened usually at a particular time in the past. Here, you are referring to "when you come home" more generally. You could say, for example, "When I came home on Tuesday, I walked the dog." But here you are talking about what you do when you normally get home. "When I arrive home" is another option.  2/ "Forty five" is not wrong but it takes you more typing and it's harder to read for the viewer. Although it is not a hard and fast rule I would avoid spelling out any numbers greater than 10. (Below that, it can go either way, depending on what you're writing.)

I eat about at 8.00pm. In the evening, I usually do one of these things: watch a movie, surf on the internet, or study. I go to bed at about 12.00am/1.00am between midnight and 1am.

1/ Although you do surf "on" something (whether it be the internet or actual waves), you don't normally say it that way; you just say "I surf the internet", or I surf the waves at Bondi". It's not quite an idiom, but you can think of it as one. 2/ If you have only two or three or even 4 items, I wouldn't make them into a list like that. It's not wrong, but it seems a touch formal. I would just say "In the evening I usually watch a movie, surf the internet or study." 3/ 12:00am also isn't wrong, but it does sometimes confuse people. It's clearer to express it as midnight.

Question: I should use "have a breakfast" or "I do/made breakfast"?

Covered in part 1. A very good effort.

Because of Italki's character limits this will probably run to multiple parts; this is part 1

A Typical Working Day

It's not that these words themselves need to be capitalised, but you normally capitalise each word of a title.

1/ If you use the expression o'clock, you would just make it 8; 8 o'clock rather than 8.00 o'clock. O'clock is a word which, while still somewhat common, is tending to fall out of use these days. You can only use it with full hours (so you can't say 8:15 o'clock, for example), and now that the world is a lot faster paced than it was in the olden days minutes do matter. It would be more common to say:

8:00 (note that you use a colon, not a decimal point as a separator;

8am (am = morning, pm = afternoon); or, for military types or those who use a 24 hour clock

08:00

2/ What's throwing you off is the expression "fare colazione". It doesn't literally translate in English. In English:

To "make breakfast" is to prepare breakfast. You cook some bacon and eggs, make some toast, brew some coffee. That is "making breakfast"

When you eat the eggs and bacon and drink the coffee you are having breakfast or eating breakfast.

I drive to work, which takes me about ten minutes. I start work at 9.00 o'clock 9 am.

I usually have a 1 hour break lunch break, from 1:30pm to 2.30pm.

Remember that in English unlike Italian adjectives usually come before the noun. You therefore have a lunch break, not a break lunch. However you can also have a break for lunch, which is a different way of expressing it. In both cases you need to have an article ("a") before it.

I also have too two twenty minutes breaks, one in the morning and one in the afternoon.

1/ Explaining "too" is a little tricky. It can mean "as well", but you can't use it in front of the relevant noun like that. You could say it as "I have two 20 minute breaks too...", but I would prefer to use "also" at the front as shown if only to get rid of too many two/to/too sounds from the sentence. 2/ Remember that if there is more than one of something you need to make the noun plural. In English it is easier than in Italian; you normally just put an S on the end. So you would have one break, but two breaks.

A Typical Working Day

I think you did a good job on this entry Emiliano. I did notice some grammar mistakes I corrected, and I also combined some of your sentences as some of them sounded better combined. To answer your question, you need to say "have breakfast" or you could say "I have breakfast". If you have any questions, please let me know, and if you would like help to practice and improve your English, I'd be happy to help you, just let me know!