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Hi! what about this? Can someone check it please, thanks! This is the conclusion of my essay. Before concluding, there is another important question to make "should zoos exist?". It is well known that they encourage animal conservation; Nonetheless, they also encourage animal abuse for human entertainment being totally unconscious of the physical-mental problems that animals can develop. As it was mentioned previously, most of the animals in zoos are not endangered, they are there just for ambitious reasons. So, should zoos exist? they definitely should exist! But under the condition that their main purpose will be the preservation of endangered animals, and only these animals. Living in the most suitable places and being helped to not lose their instincts and behaviors so one day they will be back where they belong. Moreover, zoos must be regularly supervised to see if they are following the laws, if animals are in the best optimal conditions and if they have presented behavioral changes. In this way, most of the saddest glances will have been disappeared from the zoos.

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Hi! what about this? Can someone check it please, thanks!

This is the conclusion of my essay.
Before concluding, there is another important question that has to be addressed: "Should zoos exist in the first place?". It is well known that they zoos play a part in encourage animal conservation; however, they also condone encourage animal abuse, just for the sake of human entertainment, and are being totally unconcerned  about unconscious of the physical-mental damage problems that they have inflicted on the animals. can develop. As it was mentioned earlier previously, most of the animals in zoos are not endangered; they are there just for monetary ambitious reasons. So, should zoos exist? My answer is that they definitely should, but only under the condition that their main purpose is will be confined to the preservation of endangered animals, not of those that are not.only these animals. Living in a place that is quite similar to their natural habitat , a place where they are still able to retain being helped to not lose their natural instinct and behaviour, these animals can perhaps be released one day back to the wild, where they truly belong. so one day they will be back where they belong. Furthermore, zoos must be inspected regularly --just in case supervised to see if they are not following the law -- to find out if the  animals are given the best of care and look for any sign of behavioural changes in the animals. in the best optimal conditions and if they have presented behavioral changes. In This way, most of the saddest glances given to the animals in zoos will have been disappear  from the zoos.> This way, most of the empathies we have for animals living in zoos will disappear .
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Hi! what about this? Can someone check it please, thanks!

This is the conclusion of my essay.
Before concluding, there is another important question to make, "should zoos exist?" It is well known that they encourage animal conservation. However, they also encourage animal abuse for human entertainment while being totally unconscious of the physical-mental problems that animals can develop. As it was mentioned previously, most of the animals in zoos are not endangered, they are there just for ambitious reasons. So, should zoos exist? They definitely should exist! However, only under the condition that their main purpose will be the preservation of endangered animals, and only these animals. Living in the most suitable places and helping them not lose their instincts and behaviors so that one day they will be back where they belong. Moreover, zoos must be regularly supervised to see if they are following the laws, such as animals are in the optimal conditions and they have presented behavioral changes. With this plan, most of the sad glances will no longer take place in zoos.


**the word ambitious is used wrong. I'm not sure what you are trying to say.

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