Need your advice on my personal CV 【2】
Hi, all. This is the second part of my CV, any benign suggestions or constructive critisims would be welcomed.
I have listed the main points from my friend below so that you could have a better picture:
1. Many jargones repeatedly show up without adding significance;
2. Not clear or concise, hard to read or understand.
please try to revise it per your perspectives so that it could pop out during a job hunt.
Notes: I didn't write subjects like "I", because "I" feels too self-centered or cocky, thus gramatically they don't look like complete sentences
Working Experiences(Starts from the most recent)
1. Collect requirements and handle inquiries, provide viable medical evacuation/repatriation plans (via land, ferry, commercial flight and air charter) and travel assistance for clients.
2. Arrange, support and monitor the process throughout the entire case, make sure the whole operation procedures move forward smoothly.
3. Follow up with clients on a regular basis, maintain database up-to-date.
4. Review and supervise the performance of team members, provide monthly and quarterly KPI reports to COO(Chief Operation Officer).
5. Coordinate interdepartmentally and expand medical collaboration network, explore possible opportunities for potential markets.
1. Maintain and manage customers' basic data, liaise and communicate with relevant departments to standardize and streamline processes.
2. Verify accounts to make sure the actual revenue is recognized in time.
3. Control inventory and monitor wear & tear, improve resource allocation and utilization efficiency, optimize production schedules, and reduce inventory and the negative impact on revenue.
4. Estimate the manufacturing cost, analyze the cost-benefit of investments and follow up cost reduction measures to improve profitability
1.Collect and organize customers' information, cope with various inquiries, like products information, orders progresses and clearances, after-sale complaints and disputes etc.
2. According to the sales objectives, make relevant plans, operate on the website backstage, and assist marketing to launch promotional activities.
3. Support the accountant to check the receivable/payable payments, offer statistics paperwork.
4. Prepare quarterly sales report, recruits guidance and training to improve customer service levels and maintain customers' satisfactory rate.
Thank you very much in advance and looking forward to your replies.
Yours sincerely
Derek
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Corrections · 4
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Working Experiences(Starts from the most recent)
I agree with the other responder that you should list your job title and the place you worked. I typically use something like
Experience
Section Chief, Internal Management Documents (IMD) Program, <---Office
Servicewide Policy, Directives and Electronic Research (SPDER),<----Company
July 2013 – Present <---dates
1. Collect requirements and handle inquiries, provide viable medical evacuation/repatriation plans (via land, ferry, commercial flight and air charter) and travel assistance for clients.
2. Arrange, support and monitor the process throughout the entire case, make sure the whole operation procedures move forward (the wording here is very technical. When you say "operation procedures" do you mean medical operation? smoothly.
3. Follow up with clients on a regular basis, maintain database up-to-date. You would say update database OR maintain database, but including both sounds odd.
4. Review and supervise the performance of team members, provide monthly and quarterly KPI (don't use acronyms unless the person who is reading them knows the acronym) reports to COO(Chief Operation Officer).
5. Coordinate interdepartmentally and expand you need a "the" here or to pluralized network...add s. medical collaboration network, explore possible opportunities for potential markets. These two words are so similar is sounds redundant. I would say something like "explore (potential) market opportunities". I'm not sure whether you want to use potential or not.
Job title --company- -- dates
1. Maintain and manage customers' basic data, liaise and communicate with relevant departments to standardize and streamline processes.
2. Verify accounts to make sure the actual revenue is recognized in timetimely. Not necessary change, but just listing an option.
3. Control inventory and monitor wear & tear, improve resource allocation and utilization efficiency, optimize production schedules, and reduce inventory and the negative impact on revenue.
4. Estimate the manufacturing cost, analyze the cost-benefit of investments and follow up cost reduction measures to improve profitability
Job title --company- -- dates
1.Collect and organize customers' information, cope with various inquiries, likeincluding products information, orders progresses and clearances, after-sale complaints and disputes etc.
2. According to the sales objectives, make relevant plans, operate on the website backstage (what does website backstage mean?), and assist marketing to launch promotional activities.
3. Support the accountant to check the receivable/payable payments, offer statistics paperwork.
4. Prepare quarterly sales reports, recruits guidance and training to improve customer service levels and maintain customers' satisfactory rate. sounds very robotic and I'm not sure what you mean.
Overall very great English. Sometimes in applications it pays to be more specific..I'm out of characters..
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Need your advice on my personal CV 【2】
Hi, all. This is the second part of my CV, any benign suggestions or constructive criticisms would be welcome.I have listed the main points from my friend below so that you could have a better picture:
1. Many words repeatedly show up without adding significance;
2. Not clear or concise, hard to read or understand.
please try to revise it per your perspectives so that it could pop out during a job hunt.
Notes: I didn't write subjects like "I", because "I" feels too self-centered or cocky, thus gramatically they don't look like complete sentences
Work Duties
1. Collect orders and handle inquiries, provide viable medical evacuation/repatriation plans (via land, ferry, commercial flight and air charter) and travel assistance for clients.
2. Arrange, support and monitor the whole operation, making sure it proceeds smoothly.
3. Follow up with clients on a regular basis, maintain up-to-date database.
4. Review and supervise the performance of team members, provide monthly and quarterly KPI reports to COO (Chief Operation Officer).
5. Coordinate inter-departmentally and expand medical collaboration network, explore opportunities for potential markets.
1. Maintain and manage customers' basic data, liaise and communicate with relevant departments to standardize and streamline processes.
2. Verify accounts to make sure the actual revenue is recognized on schedule.
3. Control inventory and monitor wear & tear, improve resource allocation and (utilize efficiency,?) optimize production schedules, and reduce inventory and any negative impact this has on revenue.
4. Estimate the manufacturing cost, analyze the cost-benefit of investments and follow up cost reduction measures to improve profitability
1.Collect and organize customers' information, answer various inquiries; product information, order progress and clearance, after-sale complaints or disputes etc.
2. For sales objectives: make relevant plans, maintain back-end of website, assist marketing to launch promotional activities.
3. Support the accountant to check the receivable/payable payments, gather statistics.
4. Prepare quarterly sales report, recruit guidance and training to improve customer service levels and maintain customers' satisfaction ratings.
Thank you very much in advance and looking forward to your replies.
Yours sincerely
Derek
I have assumed that you are listing your duties for one particular job here. Normally you would write the job's title first and then list its duties.
Very well written!
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