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Nowadays, most of the zoos have changed the focus of the exhibition of animals into a focus more conscious of wildlife conservation. In this way, the preservation and protection of animals have become one of the paramount factors of zoos. The establishments for animal conservation are more suitable and more comfortable; providing a natural habitat, and contributing to a better life for those animals which have more difficulty on surviving by themselves as those who are on the endangered list. Likewise, These animals receive a proper nutrition, diets and medical cares that are fundamental in their lives. Carers of the zoos play an important role at the moment of providing to all the animal species the essential nutrients due to it is quite vital to know the different aspects of each species (gastrointestinal physiology and morphology, ecology, among others) and also knowing the nutritional composition of all ingredients and inputs used in food and medicine to facilitate the development of normal behaviors in them. Finally, another positive aspect has to do with the education people can acquire from zoos. Despite the variation in sizes, Most of the big cities have a zoo; this is how they yield chances for people to learn more about animals, their habitats, and their behaviors, also including the creation of an aware mind in order to protect and respect them. to conclude, zoos have been a target of criticism through the years ;nevertheless, they have contributed and promoted animal conservation and protection.
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HI, can you please check my punctuaction, structure ideas and the right use of connectors.
Nowadays, most zoos have changed their focus from exhibiting animals to wildlife conservation. Thus, preserving and protecting animals has become very important for zoos. Wildlife parks are more suitable and more comfortable; providing a natural habitat, and contributing to a better life for those animals which have more difficulty surviving by themselves than those on the endangered list. Likewise, these animals receive a proper nutrition, diet and medical care that are fundamental in their lives. Zookeepers play an important role at the moment providing all species with their essential nutrients, so it is vital to know the differences in each species (gastrointestinal physiology and morphology, ecological, etc) and also to know the nutritional content of all ingredients and other inputs to food and medicine to allow the animals to develop normally. Finally, a good thing is the education people can acquire from zoos. Despite their varying sizes, most big cities have a zoo which is how people get a chance for people to learn more about the animals, their habitat and their behavior. The zoos also improve awareness of animal protection and respect for animals. In conclusion, zoos have been a target of criticism through the years, nevertheless, they have contributed to and promoted animal conservation and protection.Very well written!
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