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A depressed mother I'm sad.My heart are filled with remorse .I regret that I made a mistake Which I shouldn't.Just now, my little baby was playing by herself near me.My responsibility was to look care of her,but I focused on my phone. I even didn't notice that she held a razor in her hands. And then, the accident happened. she hurted by the razor and the blood flowed out her lip.she was crying loudly .But I am scared to know how to do. My parents ran to my room and helped me.My dad pressed the wound by fingers,and then the blood stopped slowly. My baby are sleeping now. I'm still in the low mood . What happened today is a warm to me ,that I must pay more attention to my baby. I can't put her in dangerous.

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Present tense:
I'm sad. My heart is filled with remorse. I regret the mistakes I have made. Just now, my little baby is playing by herself nearby. My responsibility is to take care of her, but I'm focused on my phone. I don't even notice the razor held in her hands. And then, the accident happens. She hurts herself with the razor, the blood flows out of her lip. She's crying loudly but I am too scared to know what to do. My parents come running into my room to help. My dad held the wound with his fingers, and the blood slowly started to stop. Now my baby is sleeping now. I'm still in the low mood . What happened today is a warm to me ,that I must pay more attention to my baby. I can't put her in dangerous. Now my baby is asleep. I'm still feeling down. What happened today has been a lesson that I must pay more attention to my baby. I can't put her in danger.

Past Tense:
I'm sad. My heart is filled with remorse and regret from the mistakes I have made. Just earlier, my little baby was playing by herself nearby. My responsibility was to take care of her, but I was focused on my phone. I didn't even notice the razor held in her hands. And then, the accident happened. She hurt herself with the razor, the blood flowed out of her lip. She cried loudly but I was too scared to know what to do. My parents came running into my room to help. My dad held the wound with his fingers, and the blood slowly started to stop. Now my baby is sleeping now. I'm still in the low mood . What happened today is a warm to me ,that I must pay more attention to my baby. I can't put her in dangerous. Now my baby is asleep. I'm still feeling down. What happened today has been a lesson that I must pay more attention to my baby. I can't put her in danger.


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I noticed that you have mixed a lot of past tense with present tense. Is this story set in the current time or the past? :)

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