A formal Letter
Could you correct me, please?
Dear Director John
I am writing with regard to your project mentioned “The OLPC” which is offering laptops to our children. This is a good idea for developing countries but It is not so good for the Third World.
I believe that this will be difficult for the Third World because one of the problems is the lack of internet connection. Also, they are more concerned about their food, so I personally feel that the most important is to give a food scholarship.
I conclusion I recommend that your project only focuses in developed countries, however you should help to poor children.
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A formal Letter
Could you correct me, please?Dear Director John
I am writing with regard to your project mentioned “The OLPC” which is offering laptops to our children. This is a good idea for developing countries but it is not so good for the Third World.
I believe that this might not be a large benefit to the Third World because of the problem of the lack of internet connection. Also, the Third World is more concerned about food, so I personally feel that it is most important is to give food.
In conclusion, I recommend that your project should focus on developed countries; however, poor children would still love help.
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