Hi this is my practice for my exam, please help me with it. Thank you!
Four friends get together to have dinner. Each hold cell phones and do not socialize with each other, instead choosing to ignore the delicious dishes and beverages in front of them. What an unfortunate everyday occurrence!
What the portrayal intends to convey is that, friends or relatives get alienated from each other in the era of mobile phones. Indeed, smart phones, which weaves a huge net of the world, bring great convenience to people. If it were not mobile phones, human would live in an outdated world that they can only contact via letters which takes several months to arrive at the hands of their families or friends. Nevertheless, it is precisely mobile phones that prevents the emotion interaction between people in that friends only play with their phones when gathering. This gets to the essence of the key issue. At present, folks tends to indulge in the virtual world of smart phones so that they often ignore the real interaction with others in real life.
Consequently, what is extremely urgent for people nowadays is that, they should attempt to share their interests or lives with others in the form of face-to-face communication, rather than squandering precious and limited time in such a lifeless machine. Due importance should be attached to the contact in real world. Only in this way can people prompt emotional interaction between friends or relative.
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Hi this is my practice for my exam, please help me with it. Thank you!
Four friends get together to have dinner. Each hold cell phones and do not socialize with each other, instead choosing to ignore the delicious dishes and beverages in front of them. What an unfortunate everyday occurrence!What the portrayal intends to convey is that, friends or relatives get alienated from each other in the era of mobile phones. Indeed, smart phones smartphones, which weaves a huge net of around the world, bring great convenience to people. If it were not for mobile phones, humans would live in an outdated world that in which they can only contact each other (or "...only communicate via...") via letters which takes several months to arrive at (or, perhaps more commonly, "...arrive in the") the hands of their families or friends. Nevertheless, it is precisely mobile phones that prevents the emotional interaction between people in that friends only play with their phones when gathering (or "...when they gather together"). This gets to the essence of the key issue. At present, folks tends to indulge in the virtual world of smart phones smartphones so that they often ignore the real interaction with others in real life.
Consequently, what is extremely urgent for people nowadays is that, they should attempt to share their interests or lives with others in the form of face-to-face communication, rather than squandering precious and limited time in with such a lifeless machine. Due importance should be attached to the contact in the real world. Only in this way can people prompt emotional interaction between friends or relatives.
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