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Peter's Story Excuse me to share with you “a story from my Imagination” :) Peter's Story Peter was the only son of his parents; they lived all together in a small house. when Peter had 7 years old, his mother had a serious illness. After few days , Peter lost his mother, and he was so sad. Then, Peter's father got married from another woman. Peter did not like his father’s wife because she was not kind with him , and she obliged him to obey her rules. Peter was unsatisfied with his living conditions; hence, he left his house and his school as well when he was 15 years old. He looked for a job to get money. Peter worked as a builder in which he used his small hands to collect gravels, and build walls. Sometimes, Peter remembered his nice moments with his lovely mother, and he started crying. A day after a day, a rich man saw Peter working ; and then, the man invited Peter to his house. At the first moment, Peter was afraid, but he felt encouraged when he heard a whisper in his ears saying : “Just go my little son; I am always with you.” After that, Peter went to visit the rich man, and he was so surprised with the nice place where the man lived. The man welcomed Peter with a nice smile , and said to him “Peter, you are genius and talented boy. I can see this talent in your small hands. So, I’ll give a piano as a gift , and I hope to see you as a famous musician one day ” After a while , Peter become well-known musician through his awesome symphonies. Peter returned to the house of the man to thank him for his help, but the man left his house without even mentioning his name. Now, Peter is so indebted to “the unknown man” Thanks :)

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Peter's Story

Excuse me for sharing with you “a story from my imagination” :)

Peter's Story

Peter was his parents' only son; they all lived together in a small house. When Peter was 7 years old, his mother came down with a serious illness. After a few days , Peter soon lost his mother, and he became sad. Then, Peter's father got married to another woman. Peter did not like his father’s new wife because she was not kind to him , and she obliged/forced him to obey her rules. Peter was unsatisfied with his living conditions/the conditions at home, so* he left his house and his school/he left his town as well when he was 15 years old. He looked for a job to earn money. Peter worked as a builder, using his small hands to collect gravel and build walls. Sometimes, Peter remembered his nice moments with his lovely mother, and he started to cry.**
Day after a day, a rich man saw Peter working ; and then, the man invited Peter to his house. At first, Peter was afraid, but he felt encouraged when he heard a whisper in his ear saying : “Just go my little son; I am always with you.” After that, Peter went to visit the rich man, and he was so surprised with the nice place where the man lived. The man welcomed Peter with a nice smile , and said to him “Peter, you are a genius, talented boy. I can see the talent in your small hands. So, I’ll give a piano as a gift , and I hope to see you as a famous musician one day.”
After a while , Peter became a well-known musician through his incredible interpretations of symphonies. Peter returned to the man's house to thank him for his help, but the man had left his house without even mentioning his name to Peter.
Now, Peter is so indebted to “the unknown man”

Thanks :)


I enjoyed reading your story! Your English is very good. ;)

*Your use of "hence" is correct, but the word is rarely used.

**What you wrote was correct, but whatever reason, "he started to cry" sounds more natural here.

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You’re welcome dear Hanan. :)
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Good story. Thank you Sorour.
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Lustre : glad to hear that you liked the story. Thank you :)
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You’re totally right Sudeep. I agree with you . :) You’re more than welcome. Thanks a lot for you too.^^

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