Exam Writting As the development of science,internet is playing an more and more important role in our lives,You can see computer anywhere and how it effects our lives,playing bill and buying anything

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Soumy

Exam Writting As the development of science,internet is playing an more and more important role in our lives,You can see computer anywhere and how it effects our lives,playing bill and buying anything you want online,even something you can't find on the store but you really need it,all you need to do is type it's name on the keyboard,finish your payment,and then,it will show up in front of your door after few days,internet makes things easier that we couldn't imagined before. So how does internet change about learning,you can learn online,whatever you want to know or learn,you can get the information online,there are variety of course on the internet,some teachers make vedio on it,and then hundred of student watch it,most of them are free and some not, but it doesn't matter,more important is,not just the students can use those vedio,it's a huge step.But how about the school,can we stop learning in school if we learn online?We can't,all we learn in school is not about the knowledge on book,we also learn how to make communication with other,and it must a challenge to focus all attention on learning online at home,our ability of self-control is improved in attending school. Therefore,the trend of learning online can't make school disappear.

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Exam Writting

As the development of science science develops, the internet is playing an a more and more important role in our lives. You can see computers anywhere and how it they effect our lives. Paying bills and buying anything you want online, even something you can't find on in the store but you really need it. All you need to do is type its name on the keyboard, finish your payment, and then it will show up in front of your door after a few days. The internet makes things easier, that which we couldn't imagined before.
So how does the internet change about learning? You can learn online, whatever you want to know about or learn, you can get the information online. There are a variety of courses on the internet, some teachers make post videos on it, and then hundreds of students watch them. Most of them are free and some are not, but it doesn't matter, more importantly is, not just the students can use those videos. It's a huge step. But how about the schools? Can we stop learning in school if we learn online? We can't. All we learn in school is not about the knowledge in a book, we also learn how to make communicate with others, and it must be a challenge to focus all our attention on learning online at home. Our ability of self-control is improved in attending school.
Therefore, the trend of learning online can't make schools disappear.

Very good practice Soumy! Remember to use a 'space' after commas and periods :-) -Jason

Exam Writing

As with the development of science, the internet is playing a more and more important role in our lives. You can see computers everywhere and how it affects our lives, paying bills and buying anything you want online, even some things you can't find in the store but you really need it, all you need to do is type it's name on the keyboard, finish your payment, and then it will show up in front of your door after few days, the internet makes things easier that we could have imagined before.

So how does the internet change our learning, you can learn online. Whatever you want to know or learn, you can get the information online. There are variety of courses on the internet, some teachers make videos on it,and then hundreds of students watch them, most of them are free and some not, but it doesn't matter. The most important thing is, not just the students can use those videos, it's a huge step. But how about school, can we stop learning in school if we learn online? We can't, all we learn in school is not just the knowledge from books, we also learn how to communicate with others, and it must a challenge to focus all our attention on learning online at home, our ability of self-control is improved by attending school.
Therefore, the trend of learning online won't make school disappear.

Hello Soumy

Nice essay, I could understand most of your message without difficulty. There are however quite a few corrections - be careful with spacing - there is always a space after full stops and commas. As there is only one common internet we call it 'the internet', like the sun and the moon. You also need to focus on sentence structure, some of your sentences had too many clauses.

Hope this helps

Bob

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