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A short trip in the mountain
Hello, could you help me by reading my text and giving me some comments ?Thanks!
A member in my gymnastic club proposed a hiking in a mountain which was not far from the city. More than ten people wanted to go but only seven of us could be were free for this weekend trip.
We started from a parking in the city and arrived at the parking next to the mountain after one hour by car. We had only 600 m of hight height to reach the top of the mountain where a hut had recently been repaired for hikers. Since I had done three hikes last year and I often run a long distance, so this hiking was not too difficult for me. However, the first slope was not easy for beginners. It was with covered in small stones and slippery because it was raining had rained during the week. The second slope was nearly flat and all of us could easily finish it.
On the top, there was a well-equipped hut with a heating by wood wood heating and ten mattresses. We thought that it was really a royal house for nomads. There was also a small lake next to the hut where we took some water. It was very convenient to cook here with the water from the source also because most of us bring the camping cookwares. We had finally a long meal from aperitif to main plate, the melted cheese with breads. The meal in the warm atmosphere lasted up to until 11 p.m, then we still stayed together to talk and to play a game. The party was ended at 2 a.m. There was only one thing we had to do, it was to rest the on the mattresses until the next morning to come back home.
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Hi Linh! Your writing is mostly good, with just a few mistakes here and there. I'm not sure what you mean by 'parking' which is why it is highlighted - is it a park or a car park? It's not entirely clear. Also some points with tense. Saying 'it was raining during the week' still makes sense but 'had rained' sounds more correct since you are talking about something that happened in the past before arriving at the hiking track. Sometimes you also had run on sentences. In these cases it sounds better to start a new sentence either when mentioning something new or the sentence is overly long, rather than using a comma. That's just the things I noticed when I gave it a quick read. Overall you did a good job :)
A short trip in the mountain
Hello, could you help me by reading my text and giving me some comments ?Thanks!
A member of my gymnastic club proposed a hike in the mountains which are not far from the city. More than ten people wanted to go but only seven of us could be free for this week-end trip.
We started from a parking lot in the city and arrived at a parking lot close to the mountain after one hour by car. We had only 600 m of height to reach the top of the mountain where a hut had recently been repaired for hikers. Since I had done three hikes last year and I often run a long distance, this hike was not too difficult for me. However, the first slope was not easy for beginners. It was covered with small stones and slippery because it rained during the week. The second slope was nearly flat and all of us could easily climb it.
At the top, there was a well-equipped hut with a wood stove and ten mattresses. We thought that it was really a royal house for nomads. There was also a small lake next to the hut where we got some water. It was very convenient to cook here with the water from the lake and because most of us bring camping cookware. We finally had a long meal from aperitif to a main plate of melted cheese with bread. The meal in the warm atmosphere lasted until 11 p.m then we still stayed together to talk and to play a game. The party ended at 2 a.m. There was only one thing left to do. Crawl onto the mattresses and sleep until the next morning to come back home.
A short trip in the mountain
Hello, could you help me by reading my text and giving me some comments ?Thanks!
A member in my gymnastic club proposed a hiking in a mountain which was not far from the city. More than ten people wanted to go but only seven of us could be free for this week-end trip.
We started from a parking in the city and arrived to the parking next to the mountain after one hour by car. We had only 600 m of hight to reach the top of the mountain where a hut had recently repaired for hikers. Since I had done three hiking last year and I often run a long distance so this hiking was not too difficult for me. However, the first slope was not easy for beginners, it was with small stones and slippery because it was raining during the week. The second slope was nearly flat and all of us could easily finish it.
On the top, there was a well-equipped hut with a heating by wood and ten mattresses, we thought that it was really a royal house for nomads. There was also a small lake next to the hut where we took some water. It was very convenient to cook here with the water from the source also because most of us brought the camping cookwares. We had finally a long meal from aperitif to main plate, the melted cheese with breads. The meal in the warm atmosphere lasted up to 11 p.m then we still stayed together to talk and to play a game. The party was ended at 2 a.m. There was only one thing we had to do, it was to rest the the mattresses until the next morning to come back home.
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