President Xi's Speech
Today, although the tide of peace , development and cooperation grow stronger, the challanges we are facing is unprecedented. The world's economy is staggering thanks to the severe global financial crisis, whose deep influence is still rumbling; and the restoration of the economy is proceeding slowly and unevenly. Problems, such as climate change, resources insufficiency, pollution, food safety,energy crisis, public health, gap between the rich and the poor, natural disasters, cyber security. terrorism and so on become more prominent, with new ones mingle in. The order of the international economy and politics, in some aspects, is still yet justice and rational. And unfair competitions worldwide over market, resources, talents, technology, criteria, etc. are far from being elimilated.
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President Xi's Speech
I will correct your first, very long sentence
Today, although the tide of peace, development and cooperation grow stronger, and the challenges (that) we face appear unprecedented, the staggering world economy rumbles forth, hindered by the slow, uneven economic recovery.
I basically want to remove all of your (to be verbs) and use other words in your sentence and make them verbs ... that way, your writing will show action ... not every sentence should have is, are verbs in order to connect ideas ...
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President Xi's Speech
Today, although the tides of peace , development and cooperation grow stronger, the challenges we are facing appear unprecedented. The global economy is staggering* thanks to the severe global financial crisis, whose reverberations are still felt today;*** deep influence is still rumbling and the restoration of the economy is with its recovery proceeding slowly and unevenly. Issues such as climate change, resource depletion, pollution, food safety, energy crises, public health, the great/widening/growing gap between the rich and the poor, natural disasters, cyber security, terrorism and so on become more prominent, with new ones mingle in**. The order of the international economy and politics, in some aspects, is still yet justice and rational.->I tried to guess what you meant below.International rules and regulations governing the conduct of countries with respect to each other remain unjustified and unratified.
Furthermore, And unfair competition worldwide over markets, resources, talents, technologies, criteria, etc. are far from being eliminated.
*Staggering can be used but is not very common although it seems apt in this particular situation.
**The sentence feels too long with too many commas. Just assume the 'new ones' are included in the 'and so on'.
***Semicolons can mean your sentence is too long but this may be okay in a speech.
Although the English is quite good, the sentences are sometimes long winded and the speech doesn't really tell us anything new i.e. rambling too much. However it could just be me being biased. Haha.
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