The Stranger. Part 2. Library. Please, correct my mistakes...
Damien goes on to stay on The Druid's Island in a parallel world...
The timr went. Every evening I went to the valley where I usually trained. Recently Lisa gave me a wooden and showed me some exercises. I tried to practise diligently. Usually I swam in the lake after the trainings till the Sun disapeared behind the horison... Lisa very often joined me to go to the valley
"Tomorrow I'll bring you to the library. I feel you have already prepared for this" Lisa said.
"What? What will I learn?" I couldn't wait.
"At the beginning you'll learn Chronicle of our country. Then we'll think about what book will better to you"
"I'll strive to learn well!"
"We have nowhere to haste..." Lisa answered.
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The Stranger. Part 2. Library. Please, correct my mistakes...
Damien goes (U)on to stay on The Druid's Island in a parallel world...The (1)timr went. Every evening I went to the valley where I usually trained. Recently Lisa gave me a (2)wooden and showed me some exercises. I tried to(3) practise diligently. Usually I swam in the lake after the (4) trainings (5) till the Sun (6) disapeared behind the(7) horison... Lisa very often joined me to go to the valley(8)
"Tomorrow I'll (9)bring you to the library. I feel you have already prepared for this" Lisa said.
"What? What will I learn?" I couldn't wait.
"At the beginning you'll learn (10)Chronicle of our country. Then we'll think about what book (11)will better to you"
"I'll strive to learn well!"
"We have nowhere to haste..." Lisa answered.
1. Spelling mistake, Time
2. wooden is an adjective, something that is used to describe a noun, and cannot stand alone. ex. A wooden bowl.
3. Spelling mistake, Practice.
4. Training has no plural form, use Training, ex. I train. We trained. After the training.
5. I would rather use the full word, until, till doesn't fit well.
6. Spelling mistake, Disappeared.
7. Spelling mistake, Horizon.
8. Missing a full stop.
9. Use Take, Bring is the wrong word, you use bring when you're already there. ex. I will bring you here myself.
10. I'm unsure what you meant here, it could be ""At the beginning you'll learn the chronicle of our country."
or "At the beginning you'll learn "Chronicle of our country". (Book Title)
11. "Will be better" use the future continuous tense, I,we,you,he,she,it + will be.
(U) > unnecessary words that can be removed
Good job besides for a few errors.
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