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My first trip to New York (part two) At this first visit, I had made a reservation to the 9/11 memorial. Even if it´s connected with sadness, we wanted to show our support for the people affected by the tragic incident. The next day I had booked a table at the rotating restaurant "The View" at Times Square. The buffet was good, and for dessert there was a lot of different sweets and fruits, to choose from. It tasted very well! We also went to "the top of the rock", at Rockefeller Center. (Of course a great view!) As a part of the sightseeing tour we visited the John Lennon memorial in Central Park. One place we liked a lot was Bryant Park. This small park, with a green area in the center, offers tables and chairs. Many people reading books and playing chess. There was also the opportunity to play table tennis. But you have to schedule a time! Here is also a french restaurant. We looked at the train station Grand Central. There were musicians playing great songs. At Coney Island we ate hot dogs from Nathan´s. They tasted very good. Then we walked around the area, looked at the amusement park and the beach. The best steak we had was at Peter Lugar in Brooklyn! We got a big plate for two! (Maybe 20 pieces...) Also "Pastis" restaurant served us a great meal. It was NY strip steak with french fries and bearnaise sauce. For dessert creme brulee. Yummy! The best shopping was at "Century 21", as they offer a lot of different articles, for an affordable price. In China Town we liked the intensive pace, and the culture, too. We also liked musicians playing in Washington Square Park (a very nice park), and in central Park, too. In Greenwich Village I visited a music store. It ended up with buying a record with the Beatles. This area is nice and calm, with lushness. We also visited "Red Rooster" in Harlem. The owner, Marcus Samuelsson is from Sweden! But unfortunately he wasn´t there on this day. We visited also Wall street and Columbus Circle. A very nice and busy place! On the last day of our trip, we had our breakfast outside from a carriage. New squeezed orange juice(the best one!) and a bagel with egg and cheese. /End

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My first trip to New York (part two)

At On this first visit, I had made a reservation to at the 9/11 memorial. Even if it's connected with sadness, we wanted to show our support for the people affected by the tragic incident. The next day I had booked a table at the moving revolving restaurant The View at in Times Square. The buffet was good, and for dessert there was a lot of different sweets* and fruits to choose from. It tasted very well good!** We also went to "the top of the rock" at Rockefeller Center. (Of course a great view!) As a part of the sightseeing tour, we visited the John Lennon memorial in Central Park. One place we liked a lot was Bryant Park. This small park, with a green area in the center, offers tables and chairs. There were many people reading books and playing chess. There was also the opportunity to play table tennis. But you have to schedule a time! Here there is also a french restaurant. There is also a French restaurant here. We looked at the train station Grand Central around Grand Central Station. There were musicians playing great songs. At Coney Island we ate hot dogs from Nathan's. They tasted very good. Then we walked around the area, and looked at the amusement park and the beach. The best meat*** we had was at Peter Lugar in Brooklyn! We got a big plate for two! (Maybe 20 pieces...) Also "Pastis" restaurant the restaurant Pastis served us a great meal. It was NY strip steak with french fries and bearnaise sauce. For dessert, creme brulee. Yummy! The best shopping was at Century 21, as they offer a lot of different articles for an affordable price. In China Town we liked the intensive fast/quick pace and the culture too. We also liked the musicians playing in Washington Square Park (a very nice park), and in Central Park, too. In Greenwich Village I visited a music store. It ended up with buying a record with the Beatles. I ended up buying a Beatles record. This area is nice and calm, with lushness lush greenery. We also visited Red Rooster in Harlem. The owner, Marcus Samuelsson is from Sweden! But unfortunately he wasn't there on this day. We also visited also Wall Street and Columbus Circle. A very nice and busy place! On the last day of our trip, we had our breakfast outside from in a carriage. New squeezed Fresh-squeezed orange juice (the best one kind!) and a bagel with egg and cheese. /End

Some notes:

I have changed some usage of punctuation throughout. Compare the original to this version, and note where I have either added or omitted commas/quotation marks.

*Sweets is fine, but this is British English, not American. We would call these desserts/candy/confections, depending on the specific type.

**While there is an argument to be made that "well" is a correct usage here, no one would ever say, "The food tasted well." We say, "The food tasted good."

***What kind of meat? We never say "We ate meat," by itself. Perhaps this was a charcuterie?

My first trip to New York (part two)

For this first visit, I had already made a reservation at the 9/11 memorial. Even if it´s connected with sadness, we wanted to show our support for the people affected by the tragic incident. The next day I had a table booked (if already booked, then 'a table booked', else if you booked it at the time of the trip, then 'booked a table) at the moving restaurant "The View" at Times Square. The buffet was good, and for dessert there were a lot of different sweets and fruits to choose from. It all tasted very good! We also went to "the top of the rock", at Rockefeller Center. (Of course a great view!) As a part of the sightseeing tour we visited the John Lennon memorial in Central Park. One place we liked a lot was Bryant Park. This small park, with a green area in the center, offers tables and chairs. Many people were reading books and playing chess. There was also an option to play table tennis. But you had to have scheduled a time! There was also a french restaurant there. We looked at the train station Grand Central. There were musicians playing great songs. At Coney Island we ate hot dogs from Nathan´s. They tasted very good. Then we walked around the area, looked at the amusement park and the beach. The best meat we had was at Peter Lugar in Brooklyn! We got a big plate for two! (Maybe 20 pieces...) Also "Pastis" restaurant served us a great meal. It was NY strip steak with french fries and bearnaise sauce. For dessert we had a creme brulee. Yummy! The best shopping was at "Century 21", as they offer a lot of different articles for an affordable price. In China Town we liked the intensive pace, and the culture, too. We also liked musicians playing in Washington Square Park (a very nice park), and in central Park, too. In Greenwich Village I visited a music store. It ended up with me buying a Beatles record. This area was nice and calm, with lushness. We also visited "Red Rooster" in Harlem. The owner, Marcus Samuelsson is from Sweden! But unfortunately he wasn´t there on that day. We also visited Wall street and Columbus Circle. A very nice and busy place! On the last day of our trip, we had our breakfast outside, in a carriage. Freshly squeezed orange juice(the best one!) and a bagel with egg and cheese. /End

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