A place I have visited before. Part 1
In our school, our teacher asked us to write an essay about a place you have visited before, so I chose Tokyo to write about it. So could you help me correct this essay?
There is no doubt that everyone likes to visit famous and natural places to feel relaxed. He likes to escape the daily routine and entertain himself especially in his holiday after the hard work.
Last year, I have visited Tokyo. Have you ever been to Tokyo? It is really a stunning and awesome place. Tokyo has many museums. I went to ueno park and visited the Tokyo national museum. It is the country's largest museum. Moreover after visiting museums, I liked to find out what sports are practised in this city. I found many different sports like sumo wrestle. Likewise I tried to know how it is played. It is like other wrestling sports but it is a bit different. The wrestler in sumo carry off when forcing the other wrestler out of a circular ring. These wrestlers have big weights. The thinnest wrestler in sumo, his weight can be raised to 100 kg. However, while I was walking in the streets of Japan, I discovered that it has a unique culture with a very strict code of etiquette. The people there are very polite.
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A place I have visited before. Part 1
At our school, our teacher asked us to write an essay about a place you have visited before, so I chose Tokyo to write about it. So could you help me correct this essay?There is no doubt that everyone likes to visit famous and natural places to feel relaxed. He likes to escape the daily routine and entertain himself especially in his holiday after the hard work.
Last year, I have visited Tokyo. Have you ever been to Tokyo? It really is a stunning and awesome place. Tokyo has many museums. I went to Ueno Park and visited the Tokyo National Museum. It is the country's largest museum. Moreover after visiting museums, I wanted to find out what sports are practised in this city. I found many different sports like sumo wrestling. Likewise I tried to learn how it is performed. It is like other wrestling sports but it is a bit different. The wrestler in sumo wins his bout by forcing the other wrestler out of a circular ring. These wrestlers have heavy weights. The thinnest wrestler in sumo, his weight can be up to 100 kg. However, while I was walking in the streets of Japan, I discovered that it has a unique culture with a very strict code of etiquette. The people there are very polite.
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