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#IELTS# are they right?pls help me improve them , thank you! (8) The consumption of coal, oil and gas is the major source of carbon emissions, which are believed to be responsible for global warming. If this trend continues, the sea level would rise and it may lead to disastrous consequences. To solve this problem, the mankind needs to cut down the use of fossil fuels and thus reduce carbon emissions. (9) As the world population keeps growing, the demand for water increases every year. However, the amount of fresh water is limited and in many countries and regions, water shortage poses a threat to people’s survival and health. As the administrator of the society, the government has the obligation to control the water people use in their daily lives. For example, it can increase water price to discourage people from using too much water. (10) Moreover, fertilizers and pesticides are commonly used in agriculture and the chemicals may pollute the underground water. Many factories discharge waste water into the river and lake, which also leads to serious water pollution. Therefore, it is urgent to solve these problems and protect valuable water resource.

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#IELTS# are they right?pls help me improve them , thank you!

(8) Consumption of coal, oil and gas is the major source of carbon emissions, which are believed to be responsible for global warming. If this trend continues, the sea level will rise and it may lead to disastrous consequences. To solve this problem, mankind needs to cut down on the use of fossil fuels and thus reduce carbon emissions.

(9) As the world population keeps growing, the demand for water increases every year. However, the amount of fresh water is limited and in many countries and regions, water shortages poses a threat to people’s survival and health. As the administrator of the society, the government has an obligation to control the water people use in their daily lives. For example, it can increase water prices to discourage people from using too much water.

(10) Moreover, fertilizers and pesticides are commonly used in agriculture and these chemicals may pollute the underground water. Many factories discharge waste water into the rivers and lakes, which also leads to serious water pollution. Therefore, it is urgent to solve these problems and protect our valuable water resource.

Hello Amanda,

Just small errors and they do not stop me from understanding your texts. 

Hope this helps

Bob

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they are not connected with eache other, i just wrote some pargraphs for practice. if you can find some mistakes or unacademic phrases, pls tell me ,thank you~
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Sorry, Amanda, what's the question?? Yes, there are grammar errors in all three texts.

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