Personal Statement and Future Plans

Ever since I was a child, I have had a great passion for computer science.
Seeing how technology changes the world every day, I dreamed of becoming a professional computer scientist in order to invent new technology and bring innovation to life.
Now, as a senior studying Information Technology in the University of Science, I am well on my way to making my dream come true. With a bit more / a little more hard work and enthusiasm, I will graduate with a Bachelor's Degree in Software Engineering next year. Then, I plan to get an academic English certificate and apply for a Master's scholarship to study abroad in either Singapore or America. I think those two developed countries are the best places for me to not only increase my specialized knowledge, but also in terms of  opening up new horizons / providing better opportunities for my creations. After finishing my studies, I hope to challenge myself by working in a big technology company where I can then dedicate my life to creating innovative products that brighten up the future and make the world a better place.
Furthermore, in the distant future, I have the ambition to build an Institute of Technology to educate passionate students such as myself. That project will not only provide students with a suitable environment for studying and to conduct research, but it will also give them financial incentives and the inspiration to become great engineers or prominent scientists.

Good job! This world definitely needs more idealistic and selfless individuals like you. I truly wish you the best in achieving all of your goals, and will give you now, an advance "Congratulations!" on getting your degree. As to the English, not much to correct [Bachelor's, Master's, and some minor rewording...], but continue improving your vocabulary as it will help you compose better, more descriptive, yet, concise, sentences and paragraphs. I hope this helps you. J.

Personal statement and future plans

Ever since I was a child, I have had a great passion in for computer science.
Seeing how technology changes the world everyday, I dream* of becoming a professional computer scientist in order to invent new technology and bring innovation to life.
Now, as an Information Technology senior in University of Science, I am on my way to make my dream come true. With hard work and enthusiasm, I will graduate with a Bachelor Degree in Software Engineering next year. Then, I will get an academic English certificate and apply for a Master's scholarship to study abroad in Singapore or America., Bbecause I think these developed countries are the best place for me to not only increase my specialist knowledge, but also to open up new horizons for my creation. After finishing my studying studies, I want to challenge myself to work in a big technology company, so I can dedicate my life to create creating innovative products that light up the future, and to make the world a better place!
Furthermore, in a far future, I have the ambition to run a project to build an Institute of Technology to educate passionate students like me. This project would not only give students a suitable environment for researching, but also give them financial incentives and inspire them to become great engineers or prominent scientists.

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Hi Blue,

I'm not a native English speaker, but I hope this will help in some way! I'm also a computer scientist and I did a one-year exchange in the U.S. during my bachelor's. It was a great experience. Good luck with your applications!

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Notes:

* I highlighted "I dream" because even though it's not wrong, I think it makes sense to say "I dreamed [then] of becoming (...). Now (...) I am on my way to make my dream come true."

* Starting sentences with "Because" only works if there is a subordinate clause. Example: http://writing.msu.edu/starting-a-sentence-with-because/