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Do laws restrict our freedom? Laws are the rules what are enacted to impose on people or protect people's rights. Although people's freedom are restricted in some extent by laws, I still believe they are essential in regulating people's behaviour. If citizens obey the rules and regulations, society could be kept in order, and the economy could be developed prosperously. In contrast, the traffic accident would increase and the traffic congestion would become a severe problem if somebody behaves against traffic rules. People who sell the fake and inferior products on the Internet should be punished by laws, otherwise consumers would not dare to buy anything online, thus impact the economy adversely. With the restriction of laws, people can also live in a harmonious and closely-knit society to enjoy their life. Like sometimes people are likely to be motivated by self-interest to do something harmful to others. If they abide by the regulations, they will respect and get alone with others well. Admittedly, laws are inevitably restrain individuals' freedom sometimes, even hamper the social development. For instance, the commercial activities would not be prosperous while various restrictions was imposed to the market by the government. High income earners have to subject to a considerable amount of incoming tax required by laws. As a result, people tend to miss out motivation to put in their effort to promote the income. The state should relieve some limitation to encourage people's revolution and creation which will be beneficial to the development of society. It is reasonable to conclude that society could not run stably without laws which primary purpose is to maintain a peaceful life for individuals, though these rules curb people to act at will.

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Admittedly, laws are inevitably restrain individuals' freedom sometimes, If something is“inevitable”, it ALWAYS happens//if you want to keep the caveat, you could say something like: "laws will inevitably lead to some restrictions on individuals' freedom" and even hamper the social development. For instance, the commercial activities would not be prosperous while if various restrictions  was were imposed to on the market by the government. High income earners have to subject themselves to a considerable amount of income tax as required by laws. As a result, people tend to miss out lose the motivation to put in their effort to promote the increase their income. The state should relieve remove some limitations to encourage people's revolution and creation innovation and creativity, which will be are beneficial to the development of society. OR: "If the state removed some..., it would be beneficial to..."

It is reasonable to conclude that society could not run stably without laws, which whose primary purpose is to maintain a peaceful life for individuals, though these rules curb people's ability to act at will.


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Do laws restrict our freedom?

Laws are the rules what that are enacted to impose on people 你在这里翻译什么中文单词?你的意思不太明白。or protect people's rights. Although people's freedoms are OR: freedom is restricted in to some extent by laws, I still believe they that laws are essential in regulating people's behaviour. It wasn't clear whether "they" referred to "laws" or "freedoms", so I replaced the pronoun

If citizens obey the rules and regulations, society could can be kept in order, OR: if citizens obeyED the rules and regulations, society COULD... and the economy could can be developed prosperously. In contrast, the number of traffic accidents would increase and the traffic congestion would become a severe problem if somebody behaves everyone behaved against traffic rules. Both of these sentences are "type 2 conditional mood", so the "if" clause needs to be in the past tense// http://www.ef.com/english-resources/english-grammar/conditional/ People who sell the fake and inferior products on the Internet should be punished by laws, "punished by law" is a set phrase otherwise consumers would not dare to buy anything online, thus impacting the economy adversely.

Within the restriction of laws, people can also live in a harmonious and closely-knit society to and enjoy their life. Like sometimes people are likely to be motivated by self-interest to do something harmful to others. If they abide by the regulations, they will respect each other and get along well with others well.

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