A night in the kitchen

All day  I listen to sounds very very low sounds  but one day I am curious and look outside of my door, and I can see a shadow enter into  the kitchen, but I wanted to know who was there, so I tiptoed  to the kitchen door, and my brother was eating the fruit that we have/brought?  for our grandmother.When he saw me, he stood up and started to pace around the  room.

I strolled over  to him and said "It is bad to eat alone, it is best if you share it with me" ha ha ha, the fruits were delicious.

This story is fictitious, :P
I am reviewing the movement, pace, stroll, tiptoe

The verb tense switches from present to past. It might be better to pick one or the other. Just a suggestion!!

A night in the kitchen

All day I listen to sounds that are very very low. One day I become curious and look around the border of my door, and I can see a shadow enter in the kitchen.I want know who this is (was), so I tiptoe to the kitchen door, and see (that) my brother eating (ate) the fruit that we have (had) for our grandmother. When he sees me, he stands up and started to pace the room.

I strolled over to him and said "It is bad to eat that alone, it is better if you share with me" jejeejej, the fruits were delicious.

This story is fiction, :P
I am reviewing the movement, pace, stroll, tiptoe

* words in ( - ) are past tense versions of words used

* Some spelling mistakes have been corrected.

* Use more stops (.)