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The chart on the left shows performance of the Someland’s key exports, their values in USD billion in 2005, 2015 and future projections for 2025.
To begin, the international tourism as the largest exporting sector accounted for $6 billion at the start of observation in 2005. Two smaller groups - meat products and dairy products generated in the same year $4 and $4,5 billion, respectively.
Overall, it can be seen that the dynamics differs significantly from group to group. While the international tourism is becoming increasingly more important for Someland’s economy, contributing up to $8 billion in 2025, the export of meat products experiences a fall and is estimated to contract further to $2,5 billion in 2025.
According to the data, in 2005 Someland exported the dairy products worth around $4,5 billion, since then there has been significant rise in sales, reaching almost $8 billion in 2015. Nonetheless, experts expect the drop in group’s revenue by nearly 10% by 2025.
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Hello, could you please check this text, thank you in advance!
The chart on the left shows performance of the Someland’s key exports, their values in USD billion in 2005, 2015 and future projections for 2025.To begin, the international tourism as the largest exporting sector accounted for $6 billion at the start of observation in 2005. Two smaller groups - meat products and dairy products generated in the same year $4 and $4,5 billion, respectively.
Overall, it can be seen that the dynamics differs significantly from group to group. While the international tourism is becoming increasingly more important for Someland’s economy, contributing up to $8 billion in 2025, the export of meat products experiences a fall and is estimated to contract further to $2,5 billion in 2025.
According to the data, in 2005 Someland exported the dairy products worth around $4,5 billion, since then there has been significant rise in sales, reaching almost $8 billion in 2015. Nonetheless, experts expect the drop in group’s revenue by nearly 10% by 2025.
On your second sentence you should use Someland and not international because it is vague you also missed some punctuation. It should look more like this "To begin, Someland's tourism, as the largest exporting sector accounted for 6 billion in revenues at the start of the observation in 2005." (I used revenue in the sentence because even though you prefaced the 6 with a dollar sign it was still vague) Your next sentence had some redundancies " Two smaller groups, meat and dairy products generated in the same year, 4 and 4.5 billion dollars respectively." Well you get the gist. Even though we live in an era where short cuts have become the norm in our computer driven society; one should never neglect the proper use of grammar and the art of writing.
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