Could someone please help me with this text about my website and myself? Thanks in advance! :)
Welcome to my personal blog about men care, cosmetics, health and other issues related to well-being from the perspective of a guy.
The idea of this blog came up after realizing the existing lack of blogs and websites in portuguese that provide complete and quality information about this whole universe, in spite of the numerous blogs dedicated (mostly) to the female audience.
Although the various girl's blogs talking about beauty and well-being, we have to recognize and to admit that men care is sometimes a different universe which deserves special attention. Of course some of the tips provided by girls are useful and quite relevant, and we should profit from that but, to me, it seems much more interesting to enhance and build my knowledge about men's care from websites and blogs written by men.
My intention here is to, not only relate my personal experiences regarding the products I use or have the intention to use, but also to demystify, mostly and specially for brazilian readers, which have the opinion that taking care of our skin and body is so much of a fussy or gay thing.
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Could someone please help me with this text about my website and myself? Thanks in advance! :)
Welcome to my personal blog about men care, cosmetics, health and other issues related to well-being from the perspective of a guy.The idea of this blog came up after realizing the existing lack of blogs and websites in pPortuguese that provide complete and quality information about this whole universe, in spite of the numerous blogs dedicated (mostly) to the female audience.
Although there are various girl'sgirls' blogs talking about beauty and well-being, we have to recognize and to admit that men-care is sometimes a different universe whichthat [[when used properly, "which'' introduces an independent clause and would be preceded by a comma, whereas "that" introduces a dependent clause and would not preceded by a comma.]] deserves special attention. Of course some of the tips provided by girls are useful and quite relevant, and we should profit from them [[ugh -- there's an ambiguity of reference here, because "them" could refer either to "some of the tips" or to "girls," but both are plural so you need to use "them" and not "that." And the context should make it clear that "some of the tips" is what "them" refers to]], but to me that but, to me, it seems much more interesting to enhance and build my knowledge about men's care from websites and blogs written by men.
My intention here is to, not only to relate my personal experiences regarding the products I use or have the intention to use, but also to demystify, mostly and especially for bBrazilian readers, whichwho have the opinion that taking care of our skin and body is so much of a fussy or gay thing.
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