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TOEFL independent writing
Question: Some people say that physical exercise should be a required part of every school day. Others believe that students should spend the whole school day on academic studies. Which opinion do you agree with? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.My personal opinion:
A good grade or a healthy life? Which of them do you prefer? Let’s answer the next question and find the answer! Should sport should be a required part of every school day or not? Even though some people think that students should spend the whole day studying at school, I believe that physical exercises have to be included each day because sport makes people fresh and happy. Besides that, exercise helps one study better. Also, if we want to be healthy we should teach our children how important sport is and that even 30 minutes' exercise will guarantee them and ourselves a healthy life.
I think physical exercise is useful because it makes children happy and fresh. Sport has a good effect on people. When we exercise our bodies feel better and our brains start to work good and with better brains comes an increase in productivity. For instance, comparing two children, we see that the one who does exercise studies better than that one who does not. Thus we notice that sport has to be required in a school schedule.
A healthy life due to regular sport. Probably children should sport from school meaning that as children spend so much time there, it could be a good habit. Therefore they will exercise every day and probably like it. For example, I have been doing exercise from my childhood and now I just cannot do without it. I do it every morning and for the rest of the day I feel nice and happy.
Thus, as we see, sport is really important. So at school it must be a required part of every school day. So let’s just take care about it and be sure that our children do it every day. What about you? What do you think? Do you want your child have a healthy life where each day of theirs is productive?
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TOEFL independent writing
Question: Some people say that physical exercise should be a required part of every school day. Other people believe that students should spend the whole school day on academic studies. Which opinion do you agree with? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.My personal opinion:
A good grade or healthy life? Which of them do you prefer? Let’s answer the next question and find the answer! Should sports be a required part of every school day, or no? Even though some people think that students should spend the whole day studying at school, I believe that physical exercises have to be part of every school day because sports make people fresh and happy. Besides that, good excercise causes poductive studying. Also, if we want to have a healthy life, we should start teaching our children how sport is important and even with 30 minutes of exercise, we can guarantee a healthy life for them and even for ourselves.
The first reason why I think physical exercise is useful is because it makes children happy and fresh. Sport has a good effect on people. When we do exercise our body feels better and our brain starts to work well, so if the brain starts to work better the production of what we are doing rises. For instance, if we compare two children, we will see that the one who does exercise understands the material being studied better than the one who does not. So we should make sport required in the schedules at schools.
Second, healthy life is caused by regular sport. Children should probably start to do this since they are at school. I mean, as children spend so much time there, it could be a good habbit. Therefore, they will do exercises every day, and probably will like it. For example, I have been doing exercise since my childhood and now I just cannot go without it. I do it every morning and for whole day I feel nice and happy.
Thus, as we see, sport is really important. At school it must be a required every day. So let’s just take care of it and be sure that our children do it every day. What about you? What do you think about it? Do you want your child to have a healthy life and have each of his or her days be productive?
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