Toefl essay 3.0
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: in twenty years there will be fewer cars on the road than there are today.
I disagree with the statement above. The rate of automobile ownership increases every year. In fact, nowadays I see so many more cars on the road than I had saw before. I feel this way for two main reasons that I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, in logic, as the world's population continues to grow, as the number of cars on the road will be increase. Every year I see more and more people and cars on my city. I remember that when I was a child, there were few cars where I live. Almost had no traffic. The city was very calm, in part, because of the few habitants in there. However, nowadays there are so many cars on the road that sometimes I spend hours in the transit.
There are some places that the easiest and quickly way to go to is by car. On the other hand, the public transportation is getting better. Firstly, because of the government’s investment. Secondly, some international protocols urge for a better ambient protection, including alternatives for transportations like cars. The cars pollutes very much the air with CO². Public transportations usually pollutes the air too, but in a less harmful way. Because the moving of, for example, fifty people on a bus will emit very less CO2 than the transportation of fifty people on fifty cars. However, even with a better public transportation, with the increasing of population, I think that in twenty years there will have more cars on the street there are today. I can say that the improvement of the bus line on my city was not enough to decrease the number of cars on the road. I think that maybe a good subway could stop the growth of car sells, but not reduce it.
In conclusion, I think that there will not be more cars on the road the there today in the future. Firstly, because with the population grow will be have, in logic, more on the road. Secondly, because the only thing that could reduce the number of car is a better public transportation. However, I think that a better public transportation could, at most, only to freeze the number of cars, but not to diminish it.
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Toefl essay 3.0
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: in twenty years there will be fewer cars on the road than there are today.I disagree with the statement above. The rate of automobile ownership increases every year. In fact, nowadays I see so many more cars on the road than I had saw before. I feel this way for two main reasons that I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, in logic logically speaking, as the world's population continues to grow, as the number of cars on the road will be increase. Every year I see more and more people and cars on in my city. I remember that when I was a child, there were few cars where I live. Almost had no traffic There was almost no traffic. The city was very calm, in part, because of the few habitants in there. However, nowadays there are so many cars on the road that sometimes I spend hours in the transit.
There are some places that the easiest and quicklyest way to go to is by car. On the other hand, the public transportation is getting better. Firstly, because of the government’s investment. Secondly, some international protocols urge for a better ambient protection, including alternatives for to transportations like cars. The cars pollutes very much the air with CO². Public transportations usually pollutes the air too, but in a less harmful way. Because the moving of, for example, fifty people on a bus will emit very less CO2 than the transportation of fifty people on in fifty cars. However, even with a better public transportation, with the increasing of population, I think that in twenty years there will have be more cars on the street than there are today. I can say that the improvement of the bus line on in my city was not enough to decrease the number of cars on the road. I think that maybe a good subway could stop the growth of car sells sales, but not reduce it.
In conclusion, I think that there will not be more cars on the road the there today in the future. Firstly, because with the population growth we will be have, in logic, there will be more on the road. Secondly, because the only thing that could reduce the number of cars is a better public transportation. However, I think that a better public transportation could, at most, only to freeze the number of cars, but not to diminish it.
I also think we use the words 'public transport' more than 'transportation'. Good job!
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Hi Laryssa, I can't seem to copy and paste my correction into this box so here is a link to it, let me know if you can't open it :)
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1gtc2zUGQou004EaBNuTWG2zlOiUcj7PxFXS6EjQJOPk/edit?usp=sharing
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