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Please help me In the twilight,the rosy clouds were reflected in the river ,mixing the color of the water and the sky even people will confuse where was the cloud and where was the water. It was near the gorgeous picture ,by the river,that a group of sheep were foraging.There was hardly a time for them to look up at the beautiful sunset.Perhaps they were trying to take the time to chew the delicious grass again at the last minute before going home.All was a scene on the beach of the Yellow River.The shepherd went somewhere to have a rest, only these lives were free to enjoy the dusk.Here the luscious grass and sweet water plump them up,like fat baby.If approached,you would find their white teeth,as well as their rich and pure expression.

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In the twilight, the rosy clouds were reflected in the river, mixing the color of the water and the sky so even people will confuse could not tell where was the cloud and where was the water.
It was near the this gorgeous picture, by the river, that a group of sheep were foraging. There was hardly a no time for them to look up at the beautiful sunset. Perhaps they were trying to take the time to chew the delicious grass again at the last minute before going home. All was a scene on the beach of the Yellow River. The shepherd went somewhere to have a rest, only these lives were free to enjoy the dusk. Here the luscious grass and sweet water plump them up, like fat baby babies. If you approached them, you would find their white teeth as well as their rich and pure expression.
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In the twilight, the rosy clouds were reflected in the river，mixing the color of the water and the sky even people will confuse where was the cloud and where was the water. to the point that no one could tell where the sky ended and the water began.
It was near this gorgeous picture , scene by the river that a group of sheep were was foraging.  "A group" is singular! :) "A group of students was studying" There was hardly a time for them to look up at the beautiful sunset. Perhaps they were trying to take the time to chew the delicious grass again one more time at the last minute before going home. All this was a scene on the beach banks of the Yellow River.  "beaches" are usually next to oceans or lakes.  "Banks" are areas near a river. The shepherds went somewhere to have a rest, only these lives leading uncomplicated lives that were free to enjoy the dusk. Here the luscious grass and sweet water plump them up, like fat baby. If you approached them, you would find see their white teeth, as well as their rich and pure expression.

Well-written and beautiful.  Great work.

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In the twilight, the rosy clouds were reflected in the river, mixing substituting the colour of the water and with the sky, so much so that even people would even get confused as to which was which, water or clouds. where was the cloud and where was the water.
It was almost/nearly the gorgeous picture-perfect -- gorgeous in every detail -- there by the river where a flock/herd of sheep was foraging.

There was hardly a time for them to look up at the beautiful sunset. > There was never a time that they had looked at the beautiful sunset./ They hardly had the time to enjoy the beautiful sunset .

Perhaps they were trying to take use the time to chew the delicious grass again at the last minute before going home.> Perhaps they were just more keen on continuing with their munching of the delicious grass during those precious fading minutes,  before they had to head for home.

All was a scene on the beach of the Yellow River. > All these were just part of a scene of a riverbank along the Yellow river.

The shepherd went somewhere to have a rest; it seemed that only these people were free to enjoy the dusk. > The shepherd was seen resting in a place nearby/The shepherd was no where in sight, probably resting somewhere, and it seemed that people such as him were the only people who have the time to enjoy dusk.

Here the luscious grass and sweet water plump them up,like fat baby.If approached,you would find their white teeth,as well as their rich and pure expression.

> Here, with its luscious grass and sweet water, the pasture near the riverbank easily plumb up the sheep, with them ending up looking as if they are fat babies. If you were to approach them, you would find their teeth to be as white as pearl and expression as rich as is pure.

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In the twilight,the rosy clouds were reflected in the river ,mixing the color of the water and the sky even people will confuse where was the cloud and where was the water.
It was near the gorgeous picture ,by the river,that a group of sheep were foraging.There was hardly a time for them to look up at the beautiful sunset.Perhaps they were trying to take the time to chew the delicious grass again at the last minute before going home.All was a scene on the beach of the Yellow River.The shepherd went somewhere to have a rest, only these lives were free to enjoy the dusk.Here are the luscious grass and sweet water plump them up,like fat baby.If approached,you would find their white teeth,as well as their rich and pure expression.

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