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The Importance of Education With the development of science and technology, we need some creative and ingenuity people who can make the world more prosperity than before. As the saying goes, a person with ability in some field, such as science, technology, engineering, mathematics, etc, is one of the most expensive sources in 21st century. Therefore people need to master various skills through a complete education system according to one's own interests. Thanks to the advanced and multiple ways of information transmission, we can get the latest knowledge not only from traditional schools and books, but also through the Internet so that we can keep up with the modern world. Moreover our country provides us with greater learning situation than ever before so that we have no excuse for not trying best to spend more time and efforts on studying. Education will write one's destiny and, furthermore, determine the future of his country. That's the reason why we should take advantage of every chance to learn as much as possible. In addition, the importance of education is that one can receive good manners and gaining rewards after going through a rough experience of learning time. The successful men have a common key that they will set a goal first and then put in the hard work until it takes to succeed. I think we should follow these three points which can also apply to the education. Firstly, don't give up if the problem is hard to settle. Successful people will pay more attention to the challenges they met and cope with difficulties frequently. Secondly, don't be afraid to fail in the process of learning. What is more, if you persist to finish the work, it is a good chance to upgrade the level of your professional knowledge and make further achievements on the goal. J.K. Rowling, the famous writer who compose a series of Harry Potter story books which are popular around world, was once rejected when she first introduced her first Harry Potter book to the publishing company. Last but not least, don't be afraid to ask for help from teachers, classmates, or friends. It doesn't mean that you are worse than others, however, we can get more valuable suggestions from them. I believe that everything will pay off. Everyone can make progress by means of how much efforts you have paid on education.

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The Importance of Education

With the development of science and technology, we need some creative and ingenuity ingenious people who can make the world more prosperity prosperous than before. As the saying goes, a person with ability in some field, such as science, technology, engineering, mathematics, etc, is one of the most expensive sources in the 21st century. Therefore, people need to master various skills through a complete education system according to one's own interests.

Thanks to the advanced and multiple ways of information transmission, we can get the latest knowledge not only from traditional schools and books, but also through the Internet so that we can keep up with the modern world. Moreover, our country provides us with greater learning situations than ever before so that we have no excuse for not trying our best to spend more time and efforts on studying. Education will write one's destiny and, furthermore, determine the future of his country. That's the reason why we should take advantage of every chance to learn as much as possible.

In addition, the importance of education is that one can receive good manners and gaining gain rewards after going through a rough experience of learning time. The Successful men have a common key that they will set a goal first and then put in the hard work until it takes to succeed. I think we should follow these three points which can also apply to the education. Firstly, don't give up if the problem is hard to settle solve. Successful people will pay more attention to the challenges they met meet and cope with difficulties frequently. Secondly, don't be afraid to fail in the process of learning. What is more, If you persist to finish the work, it there is a good chance to upgrade the level of your professional knowledge and make further achievements on the goal. Last but not least, don't be afraid to ask for help from teachers, classmates, or friends. It doesn't mean that you are worse than others, however but rather that we can get more valuable suggestions from them.

I believe that everything will pay off. Everyone can make progress by means of how much efforts you have paid on put in education.


Very nice passage. I enjoyed reading your thoughts and ideas on education. I just corrected any grammar and punctuation mistakes. Keep working on your verb tenses with nouns (ex. "gain rewards" instead of "gaining rewards"). Your transitions between ideas was also very good. Nice job! :)

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