The Stranger. Part 2. Chapter 10. The Harvester. Please, correct my mistakes.
In a few seconds Lisa brought Damien back from the cave.
"I think the gonlin became furious by your phrase. "If I had the face like yours..." Lisa said.
"...I would join"... Yeah!" Damien answered.
When they came back to the Druid's Town Damien asked:
"I like the excursion. Let's turn to the cases. So what should I do ay first? I can't wait to do something."
"Do you see that garden?" Lisa pointed with her finger far away to the horison.
"Yeah. clearly."
"Your first task is to harvest the apples."
"I thought I will do some different and more helpful thing."
"You forget about the importance of apples. How are you going to evolve?"
"Yes, you're right. When can I begin?" Damien asked.
"Anytime. Start as early as you can. Moreover you'll do it alone."
"Are you kidding?"
"No. We haven't enough citizens to do this work. You have to supply apples all town. Don't worry. It's your first touch. You'll manage it." Lisa answered
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I haven't read the previous chapters of this novel, but I'll try my best to correct it. :)
The Stranger. Part 2. Chapter 10. The Harvester. Please, correct my mistakes.
"I think the gonlin (gonlin? Do you mean goblin?) became furious by your phrase. "If I had the face like yours..." Lisa said.
"...I would join"... Yeah!" Damien answered.
When they came back to the Druid's Town Damien asked, (no colon necessary, just use a comma when someone is about to speak)
"I like the excursion. Let's turn to the cases. So what should I do ay first? I can't wait to do something."
"Do you see that garden?" Lisa pointed with her finger far away to the horison. horizon.
"Yeah. Clearly."
"Your first task is to harvest the apples."
"I thought I will would do something different and more helpful thing (this word isn't necessary here)."
"You forget about the importance of apples. How are you going to evolve?"
"Yes, you're right. When can I begin?" Damien asked.
"Anytime. Start as early as you can. Moreover you'll do it alone."
"Are you kidding?"
"No. We haven't don't have enough citizens to do this work. You have to supply apples all town. Don't worry. It's your first touch. (First touch? Do you mean first time?) You'll manage it." Lisa answered
The stuff I wrote in parenthesis is my explanation for the correction. Great work! :)
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