Comment cacher une étoile
Il vivait un garçon qui aimait beaucoup les étoiles. Chaque nuit il les a regarder de sa fenêtre et à rêvé d'avoir son étoile. Il a imaginé comment ils auraent devenus copains, comment ils auraent joués aux cache-cache et seraient promenés ensemble.
Le garçon a décider de cacher l'étoile. Il a pencé que s'est mieux de se lever plus tôt parce que étoile serait fatigué après la nuit au siel.
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Comment cacher une étoile
Il vivait un garçon qui aimait beaucoup les étoiles. Chaque nuit il les regardait de sa fenêtre et rêvait d'avoir son étoile. Il imaginait comment ils seraient devenus copains, comment ils auraient joués à cache-cache et se seraient promenés ensemble.Le garçon décida de cacher l'étoile. Il pensa que c'était mieux de se lever plus tôt parce que son étoile serait fatiguée après la nuit passée dans le ciel.
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In french when you use past tense, if it's something that lasts (example : "Chaque nuit ..." : it lasts for every or, at least, many many nights) you must use imparfait. Then you have to know that once we start using a tense in french, we stick to it for the rest of the paragraph, except if we want to introduce some change to the duration of an action.
So, that's why : "regardait", "rêvait", "imaginait", "seraient devenus", "auraient joués" and "se seraient promenés" because during all that time this is what the little boy fantasizes every night with his little star.
Then tense changes to passé simple with "décida", "pensa" because it's like at some point the little boy takes a decision regarding his little star.
But it changes back to imparfait with "c'était" and "serait fatiguée" because the boy thinks that every night the little star would feel better that way.
Lastly I changed "au ciel" to "passée dans le ciel" as it's a more natural way to say it in french ("au ciel" is more when you speak about someone being deceased).
Good job, hope this will help you :)
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