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Job application (a task from student's book) Hello everybody, I had a task as a homework in which I had to write a covering letter for an advertised job. I would be happy to get a feedback from a native-speaker. Many thanks! Dear Mr. Cunningham, I am writing to apply for the job of camp monitor which was advertised on bt.com website. I am 21-year-old student at the teacher’s training college of Moscow. I am fluent in English both spoken and written (IELTS score: 7.5) as I studied in Australia during 6 months 2 years ago. I also enjoy working with children, that is why I am studying for being a teacher. I have some experience of working with children. As a senior class student, I have spent more than 100 hours as a trainee in several schools. I participated in several camping trips during which I was being in charge of children’s safety. I also used to play in a college volleyball team and a school theatre for several years. One of the main reasons I am applying for this job is that I want to get more experience of working with children. Apart of my background, I am a really communicative and outgoing person. As a future teacher, I had to pass psychological test one year ago and in the results I was described as an easy-tempered and calm man which has no potential constraints for working with children. I attach a full CV and photo, and should you require any additional information, I would be happy to provide it. I would also be grateful, if you could inform me about working days and hours. I am particularly interested whether Sunday is working day or not, as I plan to enroll on a Sunday French course next month. I look forward to your response. I can be contacted both by the e-mail or on my phone (109-1234567) at any time. Thank you for considering my application.

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Job application (a task from student's book)

Hello everybody,

I had a task, as a homework, in which I had to write a covering letter for an advertised job. I would be happy to get a feedback from a native-speaker.
Many thanks!

Dear Mr. Cunningham,

I am writing to apply for the job of camp monitor which was advertised on the bt.com website.

I am 21-year-old student at the teacher’s training college of Moscow. I am fluent in English, both spoken and written (IELTS score: 7.5). as I studied in Australia during for 6 months, 2 years ago. I also enjoy working with children, that which is why I am studying for to being a teacher.

I have some experience of working with children. As a senior class student, I have spent more than 100 hours as a trainee in several schools. I participated in several camping trips, during which I was being in charge of children’s safety. I also used to play in  on a college volleyball team and was part of the a school theatre for several years.

One of the main reasons I am applying for this job is that I want to get more experience of working with children. Apart of  from my background experience, I am a really communicative and outgoing person. As a future teacher, I had to pass a psychological test one year ago and, in the results, I was described as an easy-tempered and calm man which has with no potential constraints for  in working with children.

I am attaching a full CV and photo, and should you require any additional information, I would be happy to provide it. I would also be grateful, if you could inform me about the working days and hours. I am particularly interested in knowing whether Sunday is a working day, or not, as I plan to enroll on in a Sunday French course next month.

I look forward to your response. I can be contacted both either by the e-mail or on my by phone (109-1234567) at any time.

Thank you for considering my application.

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Only a few minor corrections are needed. This is very well written.


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