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A film that provokes me I believe that every successful films should have the ability to create emotions in the audience. For example, a good horror film would not just frighten the audience by "jump-scares" or terrifying monsters. It can also generate a tense, ghastly and mystifying atmosphere that allows audiences to fully immerse themselves into the film. Among the most memorable films I have watched, one film called "Compliance" provoked anger to me. The film is based on a real story in the United States. It is about an antagonist trying to pressure a girl into doing something unethical. He achieves that by pretending to be a police officer and forcing the girl to comply to his orders. However, the girl is stupid enough to succumb to the authority. She never questions the authenticity of the police officer. Eventually, she involuntarily got raped because of her blind compliance to the authority. I was very furious when I was watching the film. I thought the girl was too brainless and innocent. Moreover, seeing a young and naive girl being bullied infuriated me. Nonetheless, in the reality, the man was not charged guilty of carrying out the prank... Memphis -- 24/8/2016

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A film that provokes me

I believe that every successful films should have the ability to create emotions in the audience. For example, a good horror film would not just frighten the audience by "jump-scares" or terrifying monsters. It can also generate a tense, ghastly and mystifying atmosphere that allows audiences to fully immerse themselves into the film. Among the most memorable films I have watched, one film called "Compliance" provoked anger to in me.

The film is based on a real story in the United States. It is about an antagonist trying to pressure a girl into doing something unethical. He achieves that by pretending to be a police officer and forcing the girl to comply to his orders. However, the girl is stupid enough to succumb to the authority. She never questions the authenticity of the police officer. Eventually, she involuntarily got raped because of her blind compliance to the authority.

I was very furious when I was watching the film. I thought the girl was too brainless and innocent. Moreover, seeing a young and naive girl being bullied infuriated me. Nonetheless, in the reality, the man was not charged guilty of carrying out the prank.

Memphis -- 24/8/2016


Hi Fung! Sounds like a crazy film. Good paragraph with only 3 mistakes! :)

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A film that provokes me

I believe that every successful films should have the ability to create emotions in(to) the audience. For example, a good horror film would not just frighten the audience by "jump-scares" or terrifying monsters. It can also(would instead) generate a tense, ghastly and mystifying atmosphere that allowing audiences to fully immerse themselves into the film. Among the most memorable films I have watched, one film called "Compliance" provoked anger in me.

The film is based on a real(true) story in the United States. It is about an antagonist trying to pressure a girl into doing something unethical. He achieves that by pretending to be a police officer and forcing the girl to comply to his orders. However, the girl is stupid enough to succumb to the authority as she never questions the authenticity (authority?) of the police officer. Eventually, she involuntarily got (gets) raped because of her blind compliance to such authority.

I was very furious when I was watching (watched) the film. I thought the girl was too brainless and innocent. Moreover, seeing a young and naive girl being bullied infuriated me.

Nonetheless, in the reality, the man was not charged guilty of carrying out the prank... (I don't get what you are saying here...the guy raped the girl by imposing that he is a police officer. How is this a prank?)


There is a bit of jumping of tenses. Like I don't really know if you are speaking of past tense or present tense. 



Memphis -- 24/8/2016

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