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The Day is Here
I'm guessing about what you meant in the first sentence, but it seems to fit. "At now I will tell you" (note that "I" is always capitalised in English) is not an expression that would be used. I've suggested one way of expressing it below.
Her advice to those who are For those of you "reading this over (their) your morning coffee, procrastinating, craving a change and to get out of the rat race " At last her advice to us is JUST DO IT Life is short so if you're not passionate and fulfilled in your current circumstances, change them..
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I changed "said that" to "said" because you are giving a direct quote. You would use "said that" if you are re-expressing a person's thoughts rather than quoting them. For example "Jenny said that she likes ice cream", compared to "Jenny said "I like icecream". "
The biggest problem with the last part of the quote was that you stopped it before you reached the verb. The problem with this is clearer if you read it as if it had read "For those of you reading this over your morning coffee". OK... but what message does she have for those people? It's the message that you have expressed in your last sentence. However if you are quoting a sentence you should quote the complete sentence, or at least enough of the sentence to form a complete thought. If you are paraphrasing (re-expressing in your own words) the message of a quotation, you should only quote the relevant part of the quotation, surrounded by your own words. In this case I've therefore put the relevant part of the quote inside your description of what the quote is about. I replaced "your" with "their" (in brackets, to show that it's a replacement word) to make the quote make sense in the context of your sentence.
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