Self introducing speech - help
Hi guys! I'm trying to prepare a self-introducing speech and I would like some help to check the wording. By the way, the help is useful for this first sentence too ;)
I'm Armando Alves, born and raised in Sao Paulo, Brazil. I'm 32 years old, married with a fabulous wife Juliana. My father was born in Portugal but he was raised in Brazil (he came to Brazil when he was 7 years old). My mother was born in Brazil and met my father here. I'm the oldest of the three kids they had. I have two sisters: Amanda and Alessandra. My dad is a retired engineer, my mom is a homemaker, my sister Amanda is a Physical Therapist and my younger sister Alessandra is a lawyer.
Talking about my edicational history, In 2008 I got my masters in Mechanical Engineering from one of the best Brazilian Engineering Colleges, located in Sao Paulo.In 2014 I got a masters in Business Administration (MBA) from a University in Sao Paulo. Also in 2014 I got a certificate in Business Strategy from the University of La Verne-CA, after spending one amazing month in California.
With more than 10 years' experience working for big multinational companies as Bosch, Voith, ABB and General Electric (my current company), I work as a Procurement and Sourcing Manager for the GE's Energy Connections division, which consists in the business responsible for manufacturing systems and equipment for energy's transmission and distribution. At work I'm focused on both helping people as much as I can and doing my best every day! Maybe the receipt is working on something that you really love!
I'm absolutely passionate by engineering, cars and sports. I played soccer since I was 6, even though I'm not exactly a class player. My strength in sports was always my focus on how I can contribute better to the team. Engineering for me is not only my job, but is also a hobby. Understanding how everything works is always a pleasant activity! Talking about cars, I really love the classic cars! In fact, I did made a classic car project in 2015! I restored our 30 years old Volksvagen Santana which now looks like a brand new car! By the way, I attached a picture of the restored car!
Well, this a little bit about me! Let me know what you think! Thank you!
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Self introducing speech - help
Hi guys! I'm trying to prepare a self-introductory speech and I would like some help to check the wording. By the way, the help is useful for this first sentence too ;)I'm Armando Alves, born and raised in Sao Paulo, Brazil. I'm 32 years old, married with a fabulous wife Juliana. My father was born in Portugal but he was raised in Brazil (he came to Brazil when he was 7 years old). My mother was born in Brazil and met my father here. I'm the oldest of the three kids they had. I have two sisters: Amanda and Alessandra. My dad is a retired engineer, my mom is a homemaker, my sister Amanda is a Physical Therapist and my younger sister Alessandra is a lawyer.
Talking about my educational history, In 2008 I got my masters in Mechanical Engineering from one of the best Brazilian Engineering Colleges, located in Sao Paulo.In 2014 I got a masters in Business Administration (MBA) from a University in Sao Paulo. Also in 2014 I got a certificate in Business Strategy from the University of La Verne-CA, after spending one amazing month in California.
With more than 10 years' experience working for big multinational companies as Bosch, Voith, ABB and General Electric (my current company), I work as a Procurement and Sourcing Manager for the GE's Energy Connections division, which consists in the business is responsible for manufacturing systems and equipment for energy's transmission and distribution. At work I'm focused on both helping people as much as I can and doing my best every day! Maybe the receipt (I don't know what you mean by this. Maybe the secret, or recipe??) is working on something that you really love!
I'm absolutely passionate by about engineering, cars and sports. I have played soccer since I was 6, even though I'm not exactly a class player (i don't know what a "class player" is, but I also know nothing about soccer so maybe it makes sense.). My strength in sports was always my focus on how I can could contribute better to the team. Engineering for me is not only my job, but is also a hobby. Understanding how everything works is always a pleasant activity! Talking about cars (I think something else would work better here, like "in regards to my interest in cars" or "As far as cars go", something like that), I really love the classic cars! In fact, I did made completed a classic car project in 2015! I restored our 30 years old Volksvagen Santana which now looks like a brand new car! By the way, (this "by the way" isn't necessary. Sounds better with out it) I attached a picture of the restored car!
Well, this a little bit about me! Let me know what you think! Thank you! (I just think it sounds more confident without "well")
Just a couple very minor errors, and some suggestions! Good luck with your speech!
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Self introducing speech - help
Hi guys! I'm trying to prepare a self-introducing speech and I would like some help to check the wording. By the way, the help is useful for this first sentence too ;)I'm Armando Alves. I am from Sao Paulo, Brazil. I'm 32 years old, and married to a fabulous woman Juliana. My father was born in Portugal but he was raised in Brazil (he came to Brazil when he was 7 years old). My mother was born in Brazil and met my father there. I'm the oldest of the three kids they had. I have two sisters: Amanda and Alessandra. My dad is a retired engineer, my mom is a homemaker, my sister Amanda is a physical therapist and my younger sister Alessandra is a lawyer.
In 2008 I got my masters in Mechanical Engineering from one of the best Brazilian engineering colleges, located in Sao Paulo. In 2014 I got a masters in Business Administration (MBA) from a University in Sao Paulo. Also in 2014, I got a certificate in Business Strategy from the University of La Verne-CA, after spending one amazing month in California.
With more than 10 years' experience working for big multinational companies as Bosch, Voith, ABB and General Electric (my current company), I work as a Procurement and Sourcing Manager for GE's Energy Connections division, which is responsible for manufacturing systems and equipment for energy's transmission and distribution. At work I'm focused on both helping people as much as I can and doing my best every day! Maybe the secret is working on something that you really love!
I'm absolutely passionate about engineering, cars, and sports. I have played soccer since I was 6, even though I'm not exactly a class player. My strength in sports was always my focus on how I can contribute better to the team. Engineering for me is not only a job, but is also a hobby. Understanding how everything works is always a pleasant activity! I really love the classic cars! In fact, I did made a classic car project in 2015! I restored our 30 years old Volksvagen Santana which now looks like a brand new car! By the way, I attached a picture of the restored car!
Well, this a little bit about me! Let me know what you think! Thank you!
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Your introduction is really good. Most of it was technically correct (with a few mistakes here and there). I just made a few edits to make it sound more natural.
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