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A luxury choice A car is an important part of human identity. Especially in Russia. People buy cars to show their lifestyle, ambitions, and desires. Not rarely, a car becomes the better version of an owner. All the time, we can see "ordinary guys" in "extraordinary cars". Last weekend I saw the biggest jeep in my life. It was the very big and costly car. The owner was an average middle-aged man. He wore T-shirt, sandals and summer shorts. He sat in this big car. I thought what's wrong with you? Why did you spend a lot of money to buy it? It's unbelievable expensive and maybe it's not a better way for investing. This question pops up all the time when I see a disharmony relationship between a car and an owner. When I see an overweight guy in a sports car or an old man in a fast supercar. Why did you choose it? Last weekend I found an answer. I believed, some people wanted to be cool. They desired to be strong and confident, but they couldn't. It's hard and riskily. That's why they bought new cars which instead of them had necessary qualities. It gave them feelings like I'm cool like my car. The cold truth is they aren't. Things, no matter, how much they cost, never change ourselves. We always make a luxury choice between costly things and costly life. I wish to see more remarkable lives around me, not things.

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A luxury choice

A car is an important part of human identity, especially in Russia. People buy cars to show their lifestyle, ambitions, and desires. Sometimes, a car can even become the better version of an owner. It's common that we see "ordinary guys" in "extraordinary cars" out on the streets.

Last weekend I saw the biggest jeep in my life. It was a very big and costly car. The owner was an average middle-aged man. He wore a T-shirt, sandals and summer shorts. He sat in this big car. I thought, "What's wrong with you? Why did you spend a lot of money to buy it?" It's unbelievably expensive and maybe it's not a better way to invest.

This question pops up every time when I see an inharmonious relationship between a car and an owner. When I see an overweight guy in a sports car or an old man in a fast super car. I wonder why they would make such a choice. Last weekend I found the possible answer. I believed some people just want to be cool. They desire to be strong and confident (recommend word: macho), but they couldn't. It's hard and risky. (why choose this word?)That's why they bought new cars, whereas they don't really have those qualities. It makes them feel that they're cool, just like their cars.

However, the cold truth is: they aren't. Things, no matter how much they cost, may never change us. (It's a choice we always face: a luxury car or a fulfilling life?)We always make a luxury choice between costly things and costly life. I wish to see more remarkable lives around me, not (material) things.


Notes: 

I looked through the entire article. Your made a great point in this article. But since it's an argumentative essay, I would recommend that you use one argument per paragraph. And don't forget your topic sentence! The yellow lines are the corrected sentences, and I gave you a few better words to use. I strongly recommend you to use "Grammarly". It will help correct your grammatical errors.

Keep it up!

Sean 

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Karl, I absolutely agree with you!
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You are welcome@Olessia:)I also learnt the nice thing from your text.Thank you:)
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Cars are often used as status symbols. I think this is what you are referring to.
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Sudeep, thanks for the interesting comment!

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