Venezuela, today i wa
Hi! my name is Juan, i am 22 years old and today i would like write about my country...Venezuela.
Every morning when i m going to the university like 6 am i pass front the market and i see a lot of people waiting for buy some food since last day, there are two kind of people, the one who really need that (like a 80%) and the other one, the resellers (we called them "Bachaqueros") they people buy food with the intention to resell it by a really expensive cost, by example: If an aple cost 3.00 $ they are going to resell it in 30.00 $ and everybody have a day to buy, it depends in to our last number ID, i only can buy the fridays cause my last number ID end in 9.
In my way to the university ( Im a business administration student in to a public university) i get afraid by the thieves in the street, there are to many thieves outside , me and my friends had been victims to the insecurity many times, and isn´t imposible not to feel afraid.
After class i´m go to work in a drogstore around 2 and 10 pm, in the drogstore i see sick people the who can´t find their medicaments to get well and it is maddening, i would like help more people but i cant.
Venezuela is a lovely place and we are not going to get surrender, every one of us has his way to grow up and today i want to learn new lenguages (English, Chinesse) to be able to be a better man and help, help all the persons the who i can be able.
!good nigth, morning or afternoon! wherever you are, i´m grateful be your time with this letter.
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Venezuela, today i wa
Hi! my name is Juan, i am 22 years old and today i would like write about my country...Venezuela.Every morning when i m going to the university, like around 6 am, i pass in front of the market and i see a lot of people waiting for buy some food since last day yesterday?, there are two kinds of people, the kind who really need the food (like a 80%) and the other kind, the resellers (we called them "Bachaqueros"). These people buy food with the intention of reselling it at a really expensive cost, For example: If an apple costs 3.00 $ they are going to resell it for 30.00 $ and everybody has a day to buy, it depends on our last number ID, i only can buy the fridays because my last number ID ends in 9.
On my way to the university ( I'm a business administration student in to a public university) i am afraid of the thieves in the street, there are too many thieves outside , My friends and I have been victims to the insecurity many times, and is impossible not to feel afraid.
After class I go to work in a drugstore between 2 and 10 pm, in the drugstore i see sick people the who can´t find their medications to get well and it is maddening, i would like help more people but i can't.
Venezuela is a lovely place and we are not going to get surrender, every one of us has his way of growing up and today i want to learn new lenguages (English, Chinesse) to be able to be a better man and help, help all of the people the who i am able.
!good nigth, morning or afternoon! wherever you are, i´m grateful be your time with this letter.
Thank you so much for sharing about your country! I am sorry that food and medicine is difficult to buy, and that you have to deal with thrives as you walk to school! Good job writing in English!
- in your first sentence, the word "like" is used in casual conversation more than in writing
- not sure if you meant that people have been standing in line since yesterday...so that might be the wrong correction
- make sure you put an apostrophe when you say I'm or can't
- not sure if you want explanations for all of my corrections...if you would like me to explain, let me know!
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I'm also sorry to hear and read about the difficulties you face every day in Venezuela. I hope the situation improves and that the Venezuelan people have a brighter future ahead of them.
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Sorry to hear about the situation in Venezuela I often see reports about what you just wrote about. Good luck with your learning.
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