21 years old
Today I was 21 years old. Roommates made a small party for me. It is included: scream cake, fruits, hot dog and snacks, candies.
I lived With 2 close friends. They studied same my high school. Although each of our was studying another university, we lived together 3 years since became freshman.
Today, the first time we took a photo 3 Persons. It Is reculious! However, I don't like take photo. And roommates same, either. :))
21 years old. I hope keep smile myself, good living with grateful everyone and more adult.
Hope.
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21 years old
Today I was 21 years old. My roommates made threw a small party for me. It is included: scream cake, fruits, hot dogs and snacks, and candies.I lived With 2 close friends. They studied at the same my high school as me. Although each all of our us was were studying at another different universities, we have lived together for 3 years since became becoming freshman.
Today, for the first time, we took a photo of 3 Persons (who?). It Is reculious!ridiculous However, I don't like take taking photos. And my roommates are the same, either. :))
21 years old. I hope keep smile myself, good living with grateful everyone and more adult (I don't understand this sentence).
Hope.
Happy Birthday!!!!
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21 years old
Today I was turned 21 years old. My Roommates made held/had a small party for me. It is included with scream ice cream cake, fruits, hot dogs and, snacks, and candies.I lived With 2 two close friends. They studied same my We went to the same high school. Although each of our was studying another us has studied at a different university, we have lived together 3 three years since we became freshmanfreshmen.
Today, for the first time we took a photo 3 Personstogether. It IsIt's reculious ridiculous ! However, I don't like take photo to have my picture taken. And roommates same, either. :)) and neither do my roommates.
21 years old. I hope to keep smile smiling myself, good living well (with grateful everyone and more adult.) <---I'm not sure what you're trying to say here.
Hope.
Notes: This is a good entry, you're writing down your thoughts well however I think you need to study verbal phrases a bit more. Also on a small note that will make your writings look better; numbers one through nine are almost always written out in long form (one, two, three, four, etc.) while higher numbers are usually written out numerically (10,11,12, etc.)
Good job and happy birthday!
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21 years old
Today I became 21 years old. My roommates made a small party for me. It includes: ice-cream cake, fruits, hot dogs, snacks, and candies.I live with 2 close friends. They studied at my high school. Although each of us was studying at another university, we lived together for 3 years since we became freshman.
Today was the first time we took a photo of 3 persons. It is ridiculous! However, I don't like to take photos and my roommates feel the same. :))
21 years old. I hope to keep smiling, live good with grateful everyone and more adult. ??
Hope.
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thank @Zyan so much! Have a nice day.
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Happy Birthday. May God give you all happiness
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