Friday, 24 June 2016
Today I went to the movies with my girlfriend, we watched a film that relates the stories of the member of a family, it starts with a young lady and two men that fell in love with her. At the beginning these two guys were quite good friends but after 19 or 20 minutes they commence to fight to win the love of this madam. There was a huge difference between them: One was rich and the other wasn't, so instead of choosing the good and not rich man (as everybody would expected) the lady picks the bad and rich man. The not rich but with sincere feelings man does not know how to cope with his frustration so he decides to go to another country alone, without the woman he loved the most.
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Friday, 24 June 2016
Today I went to the movies with my girlfriend, we watched a film that tells the stories of a member of a family. It starts with a young lady and the two men that fell in love with her. In the beginning these two guys were quite good friends but after 19 or 20 minutes they started to fight in order to win the love of this woman. There was a huge difference between them: One was rich and the other wasn't. instead of choosing the good and non wealthy man (as everybody would expect) the woman picks the bad and wealthy man. The non wealthy man, who had sincere feelings, didn't know how to cope with his frustration so he decided to go to another country alone, without the woman he loved the most.0
Thank you very much for your advice!
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Hi! Just small note, I think you should be consistent in using either past tense or present tense in one story.
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