A simple day: Shopping, friendship, and soccer.

My day started at 7 a.m. First, I took a shower and then had my / some breakfast. Afterwards, I went to the grocery store to buy meat and vegetables. Around 9 a.m., I went to the bank to pay some bills and I ended up being there for approx. 1 hour. I was, however,  listening to music while I was waiting in line, and for that reason, the time passed quickly. Later on, in the afternoon I went downtown and bought a t-shirt and other personal goods. At 6 p.m, I visited my best friend who was sick and in a clinic. I had brought her some fruit, both apples and mangoes / mangos. She told me that she was feeling much better now and that she expected to return home soon. Finally, I returned to my home and  watched the soccer match between a South American team, Venezuela, and a Central American team, Mexico. Venezuela was ahead / in front initially, but Mexico later tied the score / evened the score / gained a draw.

Good job! I easily understood everything that you wrote. As to English, learning more vocabulary with allow you to write more descriptive sentences without being so repetitive, as well as to be more concise and effective. Also, some facts are just common knowledge, like Paris is the capital of France, so there is no real need to tell us that it is in France or that it is the capital, understand? Keep practicing and keep posting! J.

A simple day: Shopping, friendship, and soccer.

My day started at 7am. I took a shower and then I had breakfast. Then I went to the store to buy meat and vegetables. At 9am I went to the bank to pay some bills, I was there FOR 1 hour. While I was waiting in the bank I listened  to music which made the time go by faster. In the afternoon I went downtown and bought a t-shirt and some other things. At 6pm I visited my best friend, she is in a clinic receiving treatment because she is sick, I brought her some fruit, an apple and a mango. She told me that everything is ok and as soon as possible she will come back home. Finally, I got back home and I saw the game between Venezuela and Mexico, the South Amercian team began winning but the Central American team tied it up.

Most of what you wrote was correct but I think that the changes I made make it sound more natural.

I wouldn't use the phrase "first of all" in that sentence. That phrase is usually used when trying to explain reasoning for somthing and is more than likely followed by a "and second of all"

I also removed the phrase "by the way" it doesn't really sound like it belonged in that sentence. I think that phrase is used when trying to inform someone of somthing important or giving advice.