My Brush Writing
A friend from italki asked me on how my Chinese brush writing is coming along. Instead of just posting a photo of it, might as well make this post more interesting by doing an English translation.
This is one of my favourite love poems. What sets it apart from others is not about exalting the ongoing love but how death cannot do them part. This is my translation, intended for the enjoyment of the English reader while retaining as much local flavour of the original. If you have any question, please do not hesitate and ask. I don't bite :)
曾經滄海難為水, Once a mighty ocean a river now cannot be,
除却巫山不是雲. Those not of Mt. Wu, cannot be called clouds.
取次花叢懶回望, Passing through a flower boscage, too lazy even for my head to turn for a second glance,
半緣修道半緣君. Partly a practising ascetic that I am and partly it is because of you.
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是得. 有时候太直接也是不好的, 要看情况了.
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嗯,你的意思我get到了,我之所以说作者是克制而深情,也是因为他视与亡妻的感情为沉重的珍宝,不会轻易显露于人前。
关于 懒 我可能过度解读了,所以说随便看看就好~~
PS 好色昏君的意思是好色,昏庸的君王
。可能你更欣赏含蓄而深沉的表达,不过我觉得直接表达爱意也可以很天真性情。
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这首詩是写給其亡妻, 有了你, 什么都沒有颜色了. 詩中的比如是不要别人說作者是像个好色昏君, 同時他不能不把心中言不吐出. 以前社会不如現时, 一句就说, "我愛你" 的俗态.
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@Jeff
嗯嗯,没翻译过,就是我有点纠结。
个人想法:半缘修道半缘君,厌倦红尘,一方面因为修道清心寡欲,一方面因为你。其实还是偏向你的,懒在出尘之外有种沧桑感(因为知道再也遇不到像你这样的人了,就算有,也无心结识)。倦怠也不能说是另一个意思,引申自懒→慵懒→倦怠,lazy好像偏懒惰(→慵懒)?tired也不好,作者用懒有一种克制(秘而不宣)的深情,因为太过沉重珍贵所以不外显。
英语渣渣直接上中文了,比较主观,对英文可能理解不到位,对中文又太多个人感觉,看看就好。
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"懒" 可以译為 "tired", 不过, 用此字, 英文的意味就和詩中的原意不同了.
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