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Ielts writing task, please help me to correct it, thank you. Dear Bob, I am so excited to tell you that I got a new job in Dada Investment Company recently. As you know that the traffic jams are so heavy and it took me two hours to go to the office when I worked for the last company. I was so frustrated by that time, but now I am no more suffering. The new office is only three kilometers away from my home. Dada is a local company mainly on real estate fields. I was offered a position of the director of marketing department and there are eight colleagues in my team. The main responsibility is to make feasibility analysis, which is quite important for the company to make a thoughtful decision, for all the new projects. I also want to inform you that I am going to attend a reunion party in Shanghai with my classmates next month. Helpfully I may have chance to visit your house. Looking forward to hearing from you soon. Best regards. Guangyu

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Ielts writing task, please help me to correct it, thank you.

Dear Bob,

I am so excited to tell you that I got a new job in Dada Investment Company recently. As you know that the traffic jams were so heavy that it took me two hours to get to the office when I worked for the last company. I was so frustrated by that time, but now I am  suffering no more. The new office is only three kilometers away from my home.

Dada is a local company mainly in the real estate field. I was offered the  position of director of the marketing department and there are eight colleagues in my team. Our main responsibility is to make feasibility analyses, which is quite important for the company to make thoughtful decisions, for all the new projects.

I also want to inform you that I am going to attend a reunion party in Shanghai with my classmates next month. Hopefully I may have chance to visit your house.

Looking forward to hearing from you soon.

Best regards.

Guangyu


Hello Guangyu,

This is a nice letter, clearly laid out and I think that it covers all the points in the question. There are a few small mistakes and one piece of text I reordered to make it natural.

Task Achievement - 7+

Coherence and cohesion - 7

Lexical resource - 6.5

Grammatical resource and accuracy - 6+


Best wishes


Bob



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