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No Chinglish: Reception 1 Welcome Dr. and Mrs. Hill to Shanghai. Let me introduce myself first. I am xxx, the deputy managing director from a Sino-US pharmaceutical Co. Ltd. It is our great honor to invite you here. Nice to meet you. And let’s get our luggage there. I’ve heard of your name for years. When I was a graduate student, two of my papers once referred to your research findings. So I feel so happy to receive you and your family in Shanghai and really look forward our collaborative work in the following half year. We will provide two lab assistants for you and invite one of your associates to join our research project, if necessary. If you’d like to, we may make you live in the downtown Holiday Inn first, which costs a 40-min driving to our lab. And our company will pay for the accommodation fee. But if you don’t like that, the hostel of our company is also available for you, which is a family style apartment, located in the Zhangjiang Hi-tech Park on the side of Huangpu River, with beautiful and tranquil surroundings. And everyone loves it. Wherever you live, I believe you and your family will love the life here. We will endeavor to serve you and make you feel at home in Shanghai. If you should encounter any inconveniences in your life and work, please contact me soon and I am willing to help you out. We will host a reception banquet in your honor. Please come with your family. See you tonight. Please revise it with local English. Thanks 1. In such a case, should I use “My name is XXX” rather than “I am XXX”? In mainland China, we are taught that the first one seems more formal. 2. Is it ok to write “Nice to meet you” in the middle of a paragraph? 3. “Lab assistant” is ok? 4. “Accommodation fee” is ok? 5. How to make “Everyone love the hostel” more coherent with the former words?

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No Chinglish: Reception 1

Welcome to Shanghai Dr. Hill and Mrs. Hill. First, Let me introduce myself. I am xxx, the deputy managing director from a Sino-US pharmaceutical Co. Ltd. It is a great honor to invite you here and a pleasure to meet you. And let’s get our luggage there. Allow us to attend to your luggage.
I’ve heard of your name for many years now. When I was a graduate student, two of my papers once referred to your research findings. So I feel so happy to receive you and your family in Shanghai and really look forward to our collaborative work in the following half year. We will provide two lab assistants for you and are willing to invite one of your associates to join our research project, if necessary.
If you’d like to, we may make you live we can place you in the downtown Holiday Inn first, which will be a 40-min drive to our lab, and our company will pay for the accommodation fee. But if you don’t like that, our company's hostel is also available for you, which is a family style apartment, located in the Zhangjiang Hi-tech Park on the side of Huangpu River, with beautiful and tranquil surroundings. Everyone loves it there.
Wherever you decide to stay, I believe you and your family will love it here. We will endeavor to serve try our best to assist you and make you feel at home in Shanghai. If you should encounter any inconveniences in your stay and work, please contact me as soon as possible and I am willing will be willing to help you out.
We will host a reception banquet in your honor. Please come with your family.
See you tonight.


Please revise it with local English. Thanks

1. In such a case, should I use “My name is XXX” rather than “I am XXX”?
In mainland China, we are taught that the first one seems more formal.

Hello, this is fine. "My name is," is definitely more formal; however, I notice that you change from being formal and informal quite often in the text. I tried not to change much, but the feeling changes quite a bit.

2. Is it ok to write “Nice to meet you” in the middle of a paragraph?It was a bit awkward. 

3. “Lab assistant” is ok?Yes! Perfectly understood.

4. “Accommodation fee” is ok? Yup! It's fine.
5. How to make “Everyone love the hostel” more coherent with the former words? I tried to make everything seem more coherent and less awkward wit the changes above.

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