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Help! I am trapped in a vampire’s body, originally published in 2000, is a vampire story novel written by Todd Strasser. The story tells about a boy, whose name is Jake Sherman; he switches bodies with a vampire. He is a mischievous boy, who has two good friends; their names are Andy and Josh. They are amusing boys whose help Jake to return in his real body. The story shows us how preteens can fix a mess.
The events portrayed in the novel take place chronologically in Jake’s house and his school. The story begins when Jake’s parents go to Chicago, so he decides to throw a Halloween party. The party should be a major secret. Thus, that way no one will crash it and there’ll be no trouble. After the party’s preparation, he and his friends go to their school; there was a machine, “the DITS” (Dirksen Intelligence Transfer System). A teacher had invented to help students learn without teacher having to teach. But it had never worked correctly. Instead, it usually made people switch bodies. That machine makes to Jake switches bodies with a vampire, whose name is Vlad, the school custodian. Consequently, Jack goes dress up to the Halloween party as vampire.
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Hey! Really great job overall! I just added/changed some things in yellow and crossed out some words that could be deleted. Hope this helps! :)
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Help! I Am Trapped in a Vampire’s Body, (italicize book titles) marginally published in the year 2000, is a vampire story, novel written by Todd Strasser. The story tells is about a boy, whose named is Jake Sherman who switches bodies with a vampire. He is a mischievous boy who has two good friends; their names are Andy and Josh. They are amusing boys whose and they help Jake to return in to his real body. The story shows us illustrates how preteens can fix a mess dilemma.The events portrayed in the novel take place chronologically in Jake’s house and his school. The story begins when Jake’s parents go to Chicago so and he decides to throw a Halloween party. The party is a big should be a major secret so that Thus, that way no one will crash it and there’ll there will be no trouble. After preparing for the party, preparation he Jake and his friends go to their school there where there is was a machine called, “The DITS” (Dirksen Intelligence Transfer System). A teacher had invented this machine to help students learn without a teacher having needing to teach. But However, the machine had never worked correctly. Instead, it usually made would switch people's bodies. This machine makes to caused Jake to switch bodies with a vampire, whose name is Vlad, the school custodian. Consequently, Jake goes dress up to the attends the Halloween party dressed as vampire.
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