我中文的練習

我學習中文十個月了。了 here is a suffix means it has been, so "it has been 10 months" for 我學習中文

我寫字寫得好，可是我說的不好。that's the best :)

我想更經常練習，put adverbs before verbs here would be more suitable (it's sometimes before, sometimes after depending the word)

可是我沒有奪得機會，Subject repeated (can be omitted as well after , if didn't change) 我沒有機會 i didn't have a chance 奪得機會 would mean you actually have to seize an opportunity when the opportunity is there

{因為我的中文還不好，和我在學習和國語也和印地語也。} what did you mean?

雖然很有一點難，我希望學會更的中文。you can either say 很難 (very difficult) or 有一點難 (a little bit difficult)

feel free to ask!

因為我的中文還沒有達到交談的水準很好，而且還有我也還As in English, we try to avoid repeating significant words in close proximity 在學習韓語和印地語也。We usually use 印度語 for Hindi instead since it is the official language 雖然有一點難，最後我希望學好會更的中文。

If you have any question on my correction, feel free to ask.  Being grammatically correct doesn't mean that it is the natural of expressing oneself.  Also it is great that you are learning the traditional form as well.  This gives you the elegance and meaning to the characters.  Learn the simplified ones for doing quick things like copying etc.  After all, we all don't write in shorthand.  We are not just secretaries.  So listen not to those telling you just learning the simplified forms alone.  Always better to know both.  If you have difficulty in remembering the characters, break them into their radical components.  Each character was designed to reflect the language's culture and philosophy.  For example, 學 is composed of two hands pouring knowlege, represented by the X's into a son.  Only males were encourage to study in ancient Chinese society.  The simplifed form, though easier to write removes such insights.

I'd appreciate any corrections you have. I don't know a lot of Chinese, so please give your corrections/explanations in English!

我中文的練習  Too Anglicized, Although grammatically correct, this is considered redundant in Chinese.  When pronouns are left out, the default is for oneself, unless for emphasis.  This is cultural bias.

我中文的練習

我是紐約大學校的學生，十個月前，我開始學習中文。you needn`t to say "and" like speak english.

我寫字寫得好，可是我說的不好。 

我想更多練習，可是我沒有機會，因為我的中文還不好。you can say "奪得",it`s not a Syntax error，but ，usually we don't say In this context .

我也在學習印地語。

雖然學習中文有一點難，但我還是希望學會中文。use “雖然……但是”，like using “but”

I hope you can enjoy Chinese learning. 

吾名羅常羲，年歲十九，學於紐約大學堂。學漢語十月有餘，書寫初有所成，然短於口語，無人同習之。吾亦學印第語，漢語較之難也，吾學漢語之心堅也。

我中文的練習

大家好！我的名字是羅常羲。我十九歲了，（和 Don't appear in the sentence first.)我是紐約大學校的學生。我學習中文十个月（Word order is not correct）。我寫字寫得好，可是我說的不好。我想更經常练习，可是我沒有機會，因為我的中文還不好，我在學習和國語（mean that japanese？）和印地語。雖然有一点難，我希望中文学的更好。