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HEEEELP PLEASE Hi everybody, I am starting a crowfunding campaing to buy a bike for my dog, pleaaase help me to correct the mistakes on the text. Hello My name is Paula and my life partner is Tesla. She is a dog that resulted from the cross between a Labrador and Border Collie . Months ago , we decided to move to a new house in the city. Although Tesla has more space, we did not have a very important factor : the absence of parks in our neighborhood. Before, she ran and remained in constant physical activity . Now , in the absence of adequate space , she can´t run and play, because the streets are dangerous. Tesla , weighing 20 kilos , currently weighs about 28 kilos . WE NEED YOUR HELP! With 200 USD we can buy a bicycle and adapter to give long and invigorating walks to Tesla and so , she will have a healthy life.

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HEEEELP PLEASE

Hi everybody! I am starting a crowdfunding campaign to buy a bike for my dog. Pleaaase help me to correct the mistakes on the text.
Hello
My name is Paula and my life partner and canine companion is Tesla. She is a dog that resulted from the cross between a labrador and border collie. Months ago, we decided to move to a new house in the city. Although Tesla has more space, we do not have a very important factor : there are no parks in our neighborhood. Before moving, she ran and remained in constant physical activity . Now, in the absence of adequate space, she can´t run and play, because the streets are dangerous.
Tesla who usually weighs 20 kilos, currently weighs about 28 kilos .
WE NEED YOUR HELP! With 200 USD we can buy a bicycle and adapter to give long and invigorating walks to Tesla and so she will have a healthy life.


********I understand your situation as I am an animal lover but I am confused. Is Tesla disabled and needs special equipment so that she can run? The bike/adapter is for her, correct?  I think that it isn't clear in your essay (except for a mention of an adapter at the very end).

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Help me, please.

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