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My first english rhyme Hi guys! In russian we have a really good rhyme about granny. I just wanted to try translate it into english, please guys tell me is there any rhyme at all?) maybe my pronunciation tells me there is but native pronunciation doesnt think so) There is our granny Walking with a stick "Let us call the doctor, if you re feeling sick" "After drink his medicine, you will be alright" "Even if it s bitter,it doesn't matter, right?" "You will winced a little and after Doctor s done" "We will play the ball, toss it to the sun" "We will run around, jump towards the hills" Look at me, my granny, I m jumping over mills" Granny faintly smiled "I am not sick" she told "And I need no doctor I m just very old" "I m just very old. My hair is all gray " "And I lost my youth very faraway" Through the misty forest,there behind the sea, Through the highest mountain which top you ll never see. How get in there,people ll never know And I told my granny "Don't be sad I ll go" I will swim to there walk and row and ride Your lost youth, my granny, I will go to find!"

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My first English rhyme

Hi guys!
In Russian, we have a really good rhyme about granny.
I just wanted to try translate it into English. Please guys, tell me if it is there  any rhymes, at all?) Maybe, my pronunciation tells me there is that it does but native pronunciation may not agree. doesnt think so)

There is our granny, walking with a stick.
"Let us call the doctor, if you are feeling sick."
"After drinking this medicine, you will be alright" (Or, 'After a drink of this medicine...)
"Even if it is bitter,it doesn't matter, right?"
"You will wince a little, and after the doctor's done,"
"We will play with the ball, toss it to the sun."
"We will run around, jump towards the hills."
Look at me, my granny, I'm jumping over mills!"
Granny faintly smiled, "I am not sick", she told.
"And I need no doctor, I'm just very old!"
"I'm just very old. My hair is all gray." 
"And I lost my youth, very faraway!"
Through the misty forest, there, behind the sea,
Through the highest mountain, whose which top you'll never see.
How to get in there, people will never know!
And I told my granny, "Don't be sad, I'll go!"
I will swim to there; walk, and row and ride
"Your lost youth, my granny, I will go to find!"

 

 

Great attempt in translating and you are spot on, hardly any errors! Everything rhymes, but 'ride and find', not so much!  You can maybe, write the last two lines in this way;

 

I will swim there; walk, row and ride, endlessly, as if I were blind!
Your lost youth, my granny, I will go and find!"

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My first English rhyme.

Hi guys!
In Russian we have a really good rhyme about our granny.
I just wanted to try translate it into English, please guys tell me is there any rhyme at all?) maybe my pronunciation tells me there is but native pronunciation doesn't think so)

There is our granny Walking with a stick
"Let us call the doctor, if you're feeling sick"
"After drink his medicine, you will be alright" say either "After drinking his .." or "After you drink his .."
"Even if it's bitter, it doesn't matter, right?"
"You will winced a little and after the Doctor's done"
"We will play the ball, toss it to the sun"
"We will run around, jump towards the hills"
Look at me, my granny, I'm jumping over mills"
Granny faintly smiled "I am not sick" she told
"And I need no doctor I'm just very old"
"I'm just very old. My hair is all gray"   "Grey is English spelling; gray is American spelling.)
"And I lost my youth very faraway"
Through the misty forest, there behind the sea,
Through the highest mountain which top you'll never see.
How get in there, people'll never know
And I told my granny "Don't be sad I'll go"
I will swim to there, walk and row and ride
Your lost youth, my granny, I will go to find!"

 

I am not a poet Valya, but I think there is rhyme in your translation: stick > sick ; alright > right ; done > sun ; hills > mills ; told > old ; grey > faraway ; sea > see ; know > go ;

 

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It's rhyme time! You are a poet and now you know it.

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