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The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts depict information about the percentage of online shopping sales for retail sector in Canada in the years 2005 and 2010. They give figures for online sales in electronics……
According to the graphs, during 2005 the biggest proportion of online expenditure was on electronic and appliance, which comprised 35% of the total purchased in the year, whereas the same item was the second greatest expenditure five years later. Also, there was another decrease in sales in home furnishing in 2010 (they dropped from 25% to 15%).
Most of the people in 2005, who had expended in food and beverage and video games, made up 22 % and 18%, respectively. In contrast, in 2010 the majority of people purchased food and beverage, reaching a high of 32 % of the sales (The most popular expenditure of the year online indeed). It was followed by electronic and appliance, video games and home furnishing.
Overall, we can see the statistics show that in the gap of five years time the online consumes in the retail sector had been changed considerably.
THANKS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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I need some help with a report. Can anyone see it?
Hi! In spite of Despite the fact that I had have been working hard in on my writing, skills i follow in keep on making mistakes. Can Could anyone someone check this? look at my latest attempt below please?(I can help you with spanish in exchange.)
The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales' figures for retail sectors in Canada in for 2005 and 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts depict information about the percentage of online shopping sales for the retail sector in Canada in the years 2005 and 2010. They give figures for online sales in electronics…… ( THE PIE CHARTS DO NOT ONLY GIVE FIGURES FOR ONLINE SALES IN ELECTRONICS) Cecilia, this maybe the issue the pie chart includes figures of other online sales , not just electronics!
According to the graphs, during 2005 the biggest proportion of online expenditure was on in the electronics and appliance, sector, which comprised of 35% of the total purchase online sales in the that year, whereas the same item was the in 2010 it was only the second greatest expenditure five years later. Also, it should be noted there was another a decrease in sales in the home furnishing sector in 2010 (they dropped from 25% to 15%).
Most of the people in 2005, spent who had expended in on food and & beverage and video games, which made up 22 % and 18%, respectively. In contrast, in 2010 the majority of people purchased food and beverages, reaching a high of 32 % of the sales (The most popular expenditure of the year online indeed). It was followed by electronics and & appliance, video games and home furnishings. respectively.
Overall, we can see, that the statistics show, that in the period 2005-2010 online sales for the retail sectors in Canada has increased substantially.
Hope this helps. Stephen.
THANKS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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I need some help with a report. Can anyone see look at it?
Hi! In spite of Despite the fact that I had have been working hard in on my writing, I continue to make follow in making mistakes. Can anyone check this?(I can help you with spanish in exchange.)
The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts depict information about the percentage of online shopping sales for retail sector in Canada in the years 2005 and 2010. They give figures for online sales in electronics……
According to the graphs, during 2005 the biggest proportion of online expenditure was on in the electronic and appliance sectors, which comprised of 35% of the total amount purchased within the year, whereas the same item was the second greatest expenditure five years later. Also, there was another decrease in sales in home furnishing in 2010 (they dropped from 25% to 15%).
Most of the people in 2005, who had expended spent money on in food and beverage and video games, made up 22 % and 18%, respectively. In contrast, in 2010 the majority of people purchased food and beverages, reaching a high of 32 % of the sales (The most popular expenditure of the year online indeed). It was followed by electronic and appliance, video games and home furnishing.
Overall, we can see that the statistics show that in the gap a span of five years, time the online consumes consumption in the retail sector had been changed considerably.
THANKS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Impressive writing Cecilia! Keep up the great work and don't hesitate to ask me any questions.
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